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ATM Rewrite: B3 — 34. Soul Fire
Eric’s transformation erupted outward, muscles and bones reshaping into the massive brown wolf that had dominated her nightmares for three years. He towered over her human form, eyes blazing with that familiar predatory hunger that had once made her want to disappear entirely.Author Note: This has been a long time coming... Eric vs Kari.PoV:1. Kari (Our New Alpha Wolf!)2. Eric (Our Alpha Bully!)...
VoC: B1 — 15. Into the Depths
Veil Of Chaos IndexInline EditsPrevious ChapterPoV:1. Damon (Our New 24-Year-Old MC!)2. Sophia (Our MC's 20-Year-Old GF!)3. Damon---------------------Damon offered a respectful bow to High Cleric Sorrel Nightbloom, the pressure of her divine guidance settling into his bones like anchor stones. “Thank you, High Cleric. I understand what I need to do now.”The emerald flecks in her amber eyes...
VoC: B1 — 14. Divine Guidance
Veil Of Chaos IndexPrevious ChapterPoV:1. Damon (Our New 24-Year-Old MC!)---------------------Proceeding down the path the halfling had directed him, he stopped in front of the shrine; it really was impossible to miss.Where everything else in the district had a wild, organic beauty, Titania’s shrine was a masterpiece of controlled chaos. It appeared to be carved from a single massive tree, with ...
VoC: B1 — 13. The Path of Whispers
Veil Of Chaos IndexPrevious ChapterPoV:1. Damon (Our New 24-Year-Old MC!)---------------------Taking out the map he’d been given, he began his journey through the streets to the ancient district. According to Ashcroft, it sat in the old noble section, through the Path of Whispers. Silver bells hanging from trees were the clear sign of the transition from the lawful good capital to more or less f...
VoC: B1 — 12. A Little Companion
Veil Of Chaos IndexPrevious ChapterPoV:1. Damon (Our New 24-Year-Old MC!)---------------------The bear cub had settled his head comfortably in Damon’s lap, occasionally nuzzling against his hand with surprising gentleness for a creature that could sprout defensive quills at will. In the peace and quiet after Marcus and Ashcroft’s absence, he found an unusual serenity amidst the animals around ...
VoC: B1 — 11. Masks and Masters
Veil Of Chaos IndexPrevious ChapterPoV:1. Lady Ashcroft (Our Lovely Slave Trader)---------------------Lady Ashcroft moved through the establishment with the fluid grace of someone who belonged. Past the animal enclosures, she entered the section that housed the indentured servants, and the change in atmosphere was immediate.Where the animal area had been efficiently organized but somewhat sterile,...
VoC: B1 — 10. The Unity Bond
Veil Of Chaos IndexPrevious ChapterPoV:1. Damon (Our New 24-Year-Old MC!)---------------------Damon knelt beside the small cage, studying the bear cub; instinctively, he knew it was far more dangerous than the other creatures, despite its small, vulnerable eyes that would make Aria’s lich heart melt. Up close, the creature was both more ordinary and more remarkable than he’d anticipated.The cu...
VoC: B1 — 8. Fractured Echoes
Veil Of Chaos IndexIn-Line EditsPrevious ChapterPoV:1. Sophia (Our Monster GF!)---------------------Silver light danced across the cavern ceiling like scattered stars, each phosphorescent mote a tiny universe pulsing with alien life. Sophia drifted in the warm currents of Floor 8’s depths, rare moments of clarity catching her mind as if filtered through a kaleidoscope of broken memories.Her form...
VoC: B1 — 7. Madame Zorya
Veil Of Chaos IndexIn-Line EditPrevious ChapterPoV:1. Stephen (Our MC's Adopted Uncle/Father Figure!)---------------------Stephen rubbed his temples, staring at the legal documents spread across his mahogany table as the banquet bloomed in the great hall. Each statute seemed tailored to strip away Catelyn’s last protections, undoing ten years of work in a single night.He had no patience for ...
VoC: B1 — 6. The Weight of Law
Veil Of Chaos IndexIn-line EditsPrevious ChapterPoV:1. King Enrir Rhommo du Mentris (Damon's Grandpa!)---------------------King Enrir Rhommo du Mentris remained seated on his throne long after Damon had left and the lower nobles had emptied, the echo of footsteps fading into the vast marble halls.His mind kept reliving that ruling.An hour had passed since, and still discussions were raging.The...
VoC Split Chapters Update
I'll be posting a bunch of chapters and editing them here over the next thirty minutes.I've been looking at a lot of RR novels, and one thing I've noticed is they typically break chapters up into scenes of around 1k to 2k chapters for easier cut points for readers, I'm guessing. So, I've decided to split a lot of VoC chapters where I can to see what you all think about it. Let ...
TO Rewrite: B4 — 7. Changing the Game
PoV:1. Rachel Park (Our Lunar Hare!)2. ???? (Our New Villain?)TO Rewrite IndexPrevious ChapterIn-line Edit--------------------Rachel inhaled deeply as they walked away from the Crystal site, the life-infused morning air filling her lungs while [Strategic Mind III] catalogued every detail from the divine summit. The golden clouds overhead cast everything in a warm, ethereal glow, but she knew the m...
ATM Rewrite: B3 — 33. The Truth
PoV: 1. Kari (Our New Alpha Wolf!) -------------------- ATM Rewrite Index Previous Chapter Google Document (In-line Comments) --------------PoV:1. Kari (Our New Alpha Wolf!)--------------------ATM Rewrite IndexPrevious ChapterGoogle Document (In-line Comments)--------------------The arena’s cacophony pressed against Kari’s senses as she stood, but underneath the roar of thousands of voices, on...
UE Rewrite: B5 — 6. Eyes of the Empire
PoV:1. Elinor (Our Lich Empress!)Undying Empire IndexPrevious ChapterInline Edits--------------Elinor slowly circled her new wyvern, noting how he studied everything with calculating intelligence, not the mindless obedience of her unintelligent undead, but genuine predatory assessment.Tempest’s golden eyes with their electric blue halos tracked every movement in the courtyard, cataloguing threat...
Grandpa Fell; ATM On Saturday
My 85 year old grandpa fell and needed my help so I’m going to push ATM to Saturday release. He hurt his back.
VoC: B1 — 5. A Mother's Gift
Veil Of Chaos IndexPrevious ChapterIn-line EditsPoV:1. Damon (Our New 24-Year-Old MC!)---------------------“It’s Mom?!” Aria repeated, voice cracking with emotion. “We get to see Mom. C’mon! Let’s go, Damon!”Like I said, we go, but let’s be smart.Damon remained cautious, rolling around his neck and glancing at the corrupt man pocketing the coins. “How do I know this isn’t a tra...
TO Rewrite: B4 — 6. The UK Crisis
PoV:1. Fiona White (Our Super Stressed Fairy Queen!)2. Merlin (Our UK MI6 Intelligence Senior Officer!)TO Rewrite IndexPrevious ChapterIn-line Edit--------------------The dream began as the previous one had the night before, just after the Second Oscillation—with the mist.Fiona found herself floating through a silvery fog that seemed to pulse with its own heartbeat, her seven-centimeter frame dr...
UE Rewrite: B5 — 5. Dragon, Arise
PoV:1. Elinor (Our Lich Empress!)Undying Empire IndexPrevious ChapterInline Edits--------------The corridors leading away from the strategic chamber felt different now, more like the arteries of a living empire. Elinor walked between her parents, their footsteps echoing through passages that had witnessed the rise and fall of a titanic civilization, while her father compiled his thoughts to offer ...
ATM Rewrite: B3 — 32. The Bigger Picture
Author Note: Alright, we're back to ATM! Now that I've finished a lot of the technical stuff in Volume 2, I can focus on getting it formatted into Kindle, getting the artwork (still debating on a few things with that), and getting blurbs and things kicking around the bucket. We're starting it back up with a bang. ;)PoV:1. Aiden (Our Firebird In Battle Mode!)--------------------ATM Rewr...
VoC: B1 — 4. Sunlight Burns
Veil Of Chaos IndexPrevious ChapterIn-line EditsPoV:1. Damon (Our New 24-Year-Old MC!)---------------------Damon could feel the tension in the room as he saw Stephen sigh in relief; the battle of wills between the king and bloodthirsty nobles was over, half of them seething over racial prejudice, the other half plotting to further weaken his grandfather’s image.It was obvious that Stephen knew t...
TO Rewrite: B4 — 5. Divine Summit
PoV:1. Rachel Park (Our Awakened MC!)TO Rewrite IndexPrevious ChapterIn-line Edit--------------------A vibrance rippled through Rachel, breaking a silence within her that left a tingling ripple of power. It oscillated in a similar way as when she first changed, only this was softer, more refined. Fingers intertwined with hers, she stared down at the smaller woman’s illuminated, aquamarine irises...
UE Rewrite: B5 — 4. The Weight of Crowns
PoV:1. Elinor (Our Lich Empress!)Undying Empire IndexPrevious ChapterInline Edits--------------The rhythmic scratch of quill against parchment filled the strategic planning room as Elinor composed her response to Butter’s letter. Theresa had returned with writing materials precisely as requested—quality vellum, multiple quills, and an ornate inkwell that caught the morning light streaming thro...
ATM Volume 2 Done Editing
I went through the final edits of Volume 2 yesterday. Now it's just putting it into a Kindle format and getting the artwork ironed out for the cover. o7Thanks for your patience. Next week, I'll continue on with Volume 3 and the schedule as usual.
VoC: B1 — 3. Hell
Veil Of Chaos IndexPrevious ChapterIn-line EditsPoV:1. Sophia (Our New 20-Year-Old GF!)---------------------Where…am I? What is touching me?!Darkness. Movement. The sensation of countless things crawling over skin that felt wrong, foreign, not her own.Sophia’s consciousness struggled to surface through layers of confusion and instinctual panic. Her body felt heavy, weighted down by something t...
TO Rewrite: B4 — 4. Butter’s Offer
Quick Edit: After talking with one of the proofreaders, I decided to quickly add a part with White and leadership. Just a few lines that seem appropriate, given the situation.PoV:1. Rachel Park (Our Awakened MC!)TO Rewrite IndexPrevious ChapterIn-line Edit--------------------With the lingering rattle of chains echoing through Rachel’s mind as she watched Adoncia walk straight into the shattered ...
UE Rewrite: B5 — 3. Butter's Gift
PoV:1. Elinor (Our Lich Empress!)Undying Empire IndexPrevious ChapterInline Edits--------------The platform’s ascent felt interminable as they rose from the depths toward the junction chamber. Elinor stood beside Camellia, watching the stone walls blur past in the dim runic lighting. The thélméthra drone's dissolution had been swift and absolute, leaving her without a ride back to the surf...
VoC: B1 — 2. Judgment of the Crown
Veil Of Chaos IndexPrevious ChapterIn-line EditsPoV:1. Damon (Our New 24-Year-Old MC!)---------------------His attention locked onto Uncle Stephen—tall, sharp-featured, and composed—whose calm voice carried farther than the nobles’ jeers, though his smile never reached his eyes as he spoke to the king.“These allegations are based on a false premise, My Lord, due to the [System Trickery] Fe...
TO Rewrite: B4 — 3. Blood and Divinity
How will our long-eared anti-heroine manage to stop the golden tsunami that is Butter! How would our undead empress Elinor respond to her little sister's antics on Earth >.> Butter's getting a little out of hand!PoV:1. Scarlet (Our Ms. Scarlet Fangs!)2. Rachel Park (Our Awakened MC!)TO Rewrite IndexPrevious ChapterIn-line Edit--------------------The Montana air hung heavy with divine tensi...
I'm Called For Jury Selection
Tomorrow I write TO, so I should have that done for Tuesday. Release time might be sketchy, depending on what happens with the selection (if I am selected they only give me an hour to report to the court house and I live about 45 min away if traffic is bad).Basically, I'll be on a webinar call with others and they'll ask me questions to see if they want to strike me or not. Out of 25 peopl...
UE Rewrite: B5 — 2. The Cradle of Becoming
PoV:1. Elinor (Our Lich Empress!)Undying Empire IndexPrevious ChapterInline Edits--------------The laboratory stretched before them like a cathedral built for giants, its ceiling arching forty feet overhead. Massive workstations dominated the space, each surface polished to a mirror finish despite the century of abandonment.Elinor ran her fingers along the glass walls. It’s fascinating to think ...
