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Criticism
🕑 Added 2025-07-26 03:31:22 +0000 UTCOne of the things I would love is to get honest criticism of the writing I'm trying to develop in my stories, by that I mean, speaking with knowledge of the subject someone is talking about, or just understand some of writing in general.
I don't wanna take criticism as the "I do not like this, because is not what I wanted" or just telling me to fuck myself, simply because is not criticism at all.
Why this? well I love to read the comments I get from the stuff I do, some of those comments appear in places like "E-hentai", yes I see you. And a lot of the people there (specially the chinese community) are really against the ending of Rock Bottom, but almost no one gives me a solid argument on why is it bad for them, I wish to know so I could improve.
It's hard to tell, because I wrote characters as characters with personalities, in a way they are who dictates their own actions or how they would react to things. As a writer I gotta let them act for who they are, not make them do my biding when it's uncontrollable. I'm saying this because I'm not sure if I developed my characters properly, or is people themselves not understand what are they reading. Maybe both.
So I'm asking you as a reader, if you got anything negative or positive note to say about the development of my stories, I'm all ears, I want to improve, but if all I get is "I don't like, without much arguments" then I'll just go back and drop content without meaning.
Comments
uber
I thought it was fine, you obviously want to do something more than just smut with your writing because otherwise the ending would have been just a brainless cinder, which is probably where the Chinese complaints came from. Bug Bite 5 was boring because I’ll be blunt, I’m subscribed for the smut not the story but smut with a creative story is a bonus. The updates for Rockbottom were fast enough where it felt like the story panels weren’t dragging things out.
Zenitsu23
Maybe it's not to late for a happy end for Rockbottom... Hear me out: Rockbottom Chapter 2 plot idea; Cindy and Ryo both leave the island and go seperate ways for now. both get caught by a trainer. Cindys new trainer realized that she had a hard time and treat's her nicely and teaches her how to fight. But Ryo's new trainer froces him to Shiny-breed with Ditto (maybe with a womb-mark like in bug bite), the forced Egg laying causes Ryo's body to change similarly like Cindys. after a view months the to trainers have a pkmn-battle and Cindy and Ryo met each other again. Cindy chalanges the other Trainer for a battle, "If I win you let Ryo go, but if you win, I let you do what ever you want with me." The perfect opportunity to make things right again between Ryo and Cindy❤️🩹
