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Little Sister 9 (356 pages)

🕑 Added 2023-01-19 20:57:37 +0000 UTC

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lukeb

Perhaps for a finale to the story, the brother could get hold of the gun and turn everyone into skinsuits, including the little sister for tricking him?

Biscuits

我不会弄啊大哥刚刚赞助了头皮发麻了😭😭

kamyin1991

Firstly I would like to give my gratitude to ytsnow, true master of skinsuit story, not only the effects and "realness", but also your plot on using skinsuits in different stories. Back to little sister series. I see you would like to make a fight/ spy-like plot between the 2 sides. I am ok with that, and a bit eager for more. However, I find that the plot seems a bit loss for now, like more characters, more lines, more abilities... it seems violating your presumption to every series. I don't know, just to express my feelings upon this great art.

小朋友

文件下载下一半停了重来~郁闷

YTsnow2013

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小朋友

云盘内容看不到网络不支持

YTsnow2013

Thank you for your advice, I'll read them and consider them

Eb18

Part 4 (Summary): (1) Fleshout the story or give more importance behind things beyond petty revenge. Please (2) Refocus on the premise or core of the story. The story is called little sister after all. (3) The revenge plot (by itself) is boring and one dimensional. (4) Make Nancy's brother more central or important in story. (Reference little sister nightmare story). Things don't have to be the same but give the characters a similar kind of purpose.

Eb18

I hope that ultimately Nancy's brother gets to decide her fate in the end. He has got to be some sort of moral compass that puts an end to the abuse and weird cycle of revenge that's been happening between the girls because now Katherine and Nancy have done the exact same thing so far and i don't think either them should really 'win' since they are equally established as morally 'bad' characters at this point. He can't just be a random character that gets used whenever it becomes relevant to the story. He needs to be more central and involved beyond being somebody's sex partner or as a bargaining chip to be exploited. He needs his own development and stakes.

Eb18

Part 3: The ls nightmare story you did was extreme but it hit the exact right tone (as well as executed the premise perfectly) by having each of Nancy's actions revolve around her brother, taking out the competition of his affections until she was the only option left and he had to submit to her lust. I'm not saying things have to get this dark again, but the whole story direction of characters just trying to ruin each other's lives doesn't really tell an (interesting) story.

Eb18

What would have been even better is if those girls (Katherine and her friends) bullied Nancy's brother or caused him some sort of distress or embarrassment (big or small) in the past that could have threaded things together more nicely between all the characters. At least with the first scenario i've mentioned there's an underlying reason for Nancy's wanting affection for her brother (which has grown dangerously sexual over time and caused her to a sexual addiction problem because the intimacy she craves is not something she can easily get from her brother.) With the second scenario I've mentioned now Nancy would have been doing things with her brother in mind, trying to make him happy on his behalf by humiliating the girls.

Eb18

For example: if the brother had actually dated one the girls Nancy didn't like or was friends with them or had some sort of positive relationship with them in the past which caused Nancy to be jealous. This resentment could have grown over time then the initial revenge would have made sense in the larger context of story because now she has power to change things to suit her needs (Now nancy's motives would have moved beyond just petty or childish and become more complex. Petty motivations = boring plot).

Eb18

Part 2. @Ytsnow, spend more time on this series. Don't rush to the ending. I don't know how many parts you originally planned for this series but let the story play itself out a bit more. For better or worse in my opinion Nancy is the main character (I mean, I believe this is integral to the original premise of the story) and things should remained in her perspective for the most part. The whole revenge subplot could have worked out better if the brother was connected to things more.

Eb18

Part 1 : Hmm. This series has sadly lost its way a bit. It feels like at this point characters are just doing things for petty revenge. There isn't much ambition or drive in the cast of characters outside characters wanting to have sex. Although Breakout was a bit flawed in terms of how it built its tension and resolved its conflict, it was still consistent in terms of with its plot and premise. The little sister story is already one chapter longer and hasn't really found its footing or really figured the story it wants to tell. Like, it started of as a wish-wishfulment fantasy for Nancy, than shifted into a revenge fantasy against Katherine now its a revenge fantasy for Katherine who has become the main lead all of a sudden, all the way after chapter 7??? I'm just confused at this point. There's just too many potential story threads with different motivations for each character, which could change the direction of the story at any point now and which could result in a mess ending.

葡萄菠萝

不知道能不能麻烦私发一下，确实操作不来

咸鱼

上半部分剧情挺精彩的，多层皮物，伪装ntr，还有把人藏在熊里，角色的错位反差感很刺激，如果可以再掉点眼泪，一边寻欢作乐，一边无声哭泣就更好了。封面的小霞旗袍也很精美诱人，小霞在这部作品里亦正亦邪的表现是最吸引我的地方。下半部分穿皮寸止的设计也不错，新的反派闺蜜模型很漂亮，看着就挺邪恶的，美丽又迷人的反派角色。美娜和瑜伽老师身材很好适合乳胶衣，就是觉得不套头可能会更好一些，全程套头看不到表情比较可惜。最后在剧情高潮处戛然而止，有些意犹未尽，如果后续的剧情已经构思设计完成，希望下个月能接着做下去。之前的breakout系列个人感觉结局有些平淡仓促，或者说一边倒得不那么好看吧。希望这部能有一个更加精彩、出乎意料、不落俗套的结局，开放性结局或者正反派分别获胜的双结局模式都挺好的。看粉丝卡时发现不知不觉订阅两年整了，时间过得真快啊。虽然现在阀值有些高了不那么好用了，但每个月更新前还是挺期待的。年味渐浓，祝新的一年工作顺利，身体健康，阖家幸福。期待未来有更多高质量的作品。(*^_^*)

桃子

可以私信发一下吗，好像粉丝卡链接里面内容没有变咧

gm0075

我以為自己忘記了下載12月的連結..........

YTsnow2013

看我的教程，详细写了获取方式

YTsnow2013

我在上面就明确写着12月奖励会推迟，麻烦阅读一下，多谢

YTsnow2013

Thank you~

YTsnow2013

看我的教程

minj

催更一下moonlight

秋末染

能单独发下吗，没收到私信

我在时间尽头等你

为什么看不到9的内容

rewn.uuter

Thank you YTSnow! I love when latex is added to skinsuits, and nylon here is done very well too! Wish you a happy NY and thank you for your awesome comics you've done this year!