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2月の原稿作業のこと。原稿チラ見せ有‐Work in February. Manuscript glimpse available.
🕑 Added 2021-02-22 13:36:38 +0000 UTCみなさまいつも応援ありがとうございます～！🙏
このところ作業してましたマンガ原稿は無事2月17日に完成提出できました～。
タイトルは「あまやどり」前後編二話構成の前編です。
Thank you all for your support~! 🙏
The manga manuscript I've been working on for a while was completed and submitted on February 17th.
The title is "Amayadori", the first part of a two-part story.
*Amayadori:Meaning taking shelter from rain
掲載は3月2日発売のワニマガジン社刊：COMIC X-EROS（コミックゼロス）をベースにKomifloなどで配信予定です。海外の方々へはFAKKUで配信されるとは思うのですがいつになるかはよくわかっていないので、この作品が配信されていたら教えていただけると嬉しいです。😀
It will be published based on COMIC X-EROS, published by Wani Magazine on March 2, and will be distributed through Komiflo. I'm sure it will be distributed through FAKKU to people overseas, but I'm not sure when, so I'd appreciate it if you could let me know if this work is distributed. 😀
今回も先行でチラ見せしてきた同じシーンを貼りますので原稿完成までの経過を過去投稿と比べながら楽しんでいただければ嬉しいです。🙂
I'm going to post the same scene that I've shown in the past, so I hope you'll enjoy comparing the progress to the completion of the manuscript with the past posts.🙂
セリフは雑誌や各配信サイトで発表されたときにお楽しみください～。
Please enjoy the dialogues when they are published in magazines and on various distribution sites~.
1.
まず、こちらはタイトルページです。吹き出しがないのはこのページにはタイトルやボクの名前が編集側で追加されるからです。タイトルなどが載ったりするといろいろ隠れちゃうので全部見られるのはここだけなのです。😉
First, here is the title page. The reason there is no speech bubble is because the title and my name will be added to this page by the editor. In this post, I'm showing the page before the title was added.😉
As this is a commercial work, the onomatopoeia depicted is only in Japanese, so I will briefly explain the onomatopoeia displayed for foreign readers.
Introduction of onomatopoeia
「パッ」：It's the sound of a hand brushing away drops of water.
「ズビッ」：It's the sound of sniffling in the cold.
「ゴソ」：That's the sound of her searching through her bag.
「プルプル」：It represents the way he shivers in the cold.
「さむかったでしょ？」：March's line ″You were cold, weren't you?″
「タオルあるよ～♪」：Ellen's line ″I have a towel.″
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2.
冒頭シーン、彼女たち傘をさしてましたが、やっと雨のシーンだとわかりやすくなりましたよね。ショタのゆうと君がカギを忘れて家に入れないシーンですが扉が小さく感じたので背景描きかえて扉を大きくしています。😃
In the opening scene, the girls were holding umbrellas, but it's finally easier to tell that it's a rainy scene, isn't it? In the scene where Yuto forgot his key and couldn't enter the house, the door seemed small, so I redrew the background and made the door bigger.😃
Introduction of onomatopoeia
「ザァァァァ…」：It's the sound of the rain falling in torrents.
「メソメソ」：It's the sound of Yuto (Shota) sobbing.
「プルプル」：It represents the way he shivers in the cold.
「くちゅん」：It's the sound of his adorable sneeze.
「だれ？あのかわいーの？」：Ellen's line ″Who's that? That cute little boy.″
「となりのコ」：March's line ″He's the boy who lives next door.″
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3.
二人がゆうと君を拭いてあげるシーン。完成版は柄もついた男の子用ブリーフとなりました。男の子にはかわいい柄のブリーフをはいてもらいたいものです…。😊
そして、それがもっこりしているのを見つけたら二人ともそりゃ見逃さないですよね…。😋
The scene where the two girls wipe Yuto. The finished version is a pair of briefs for boys with a pattern. I want the boys to wear briefs with cute patterns....😊
And if they find the briefs bulging, they won't miss it....😋
Introduction of onomatopoeia
「ん〃っ」：It represents how she gasped in surprise.
「グイン」：It's the sound of the cloth shifting as she removes his clothes with a little momentum.
「モッコリ」：It represents Yuto's erection bulging through the cloth.
「ん〃ん〃ん〃?!」：It represents that he is trying to hold back his breath from leaking out in surprise.
「フキフキ」：It's the sound of her wiping his feet with a towel.
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4.
ちんちん弄りシーン。😎
今回は前回は載せてなかった上のコマ、ちんちんをいじってるアップのところもちょい見せです。黒線消し部分ありますけれどFAKKUでは無修正で見られると思いますので海外の方はお楽しみに！😆
The scene where Eren is playing with Yuto's penis.😎
This time I'm going to show you a little bit of the top panel, the part where she's playing with her cock. There are some blacked-out parts, but I think you can see it uncensored on FAKKU, so if you're overseas, please enjoy!😆
Introduction of onomatopoeia
「あわっ」：It represents that he is in a panic.
「ビンッッ」：It represents a cock that rises up vigorously.
「てろっ」：That's the sound of scooping up Cowper's fluid.
「ビク」：It represents the sensitivity of the body to touch.
「ニチニチ」：It's the sound of your fingers playing with the sticky juice.
「チュポ チュポ」：It's the sound of her fingers playing with the tip of his cock, mixing his juices.
「あ〃っあ〃っあ〃っ」：It's Yuto's voice that leaked out from the pleasantness.
「はっ はっ」：It's his little breath.
「んあっ」：That's his leaking voice.
「クッチュ💛」：It's the sound she makes when she's kneading his cock.
「ビクッ」：It represents him shivering with pleasure.
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5.
フェラシーンは勢いの線が入ったので勢いよくかぶりついているのがわかりやすくなりました。😄
The blowjob scene has a vigorous oblique line, which makes it easier to see how vigorously she is covering it.😄
Introduction of onomatopoeia
「はむん」：It's the sound she makes when she breathes in and out of his cock.
「ぬりゅん」:It's the sound of his cock in her mouth, teased by her tongue and mucous membrane.
「ビクッ」：It represents how his body is shaking with pleasure.
「ギュウウッ」：It's the sound of his clothes being gripped tightly.
「かぽっ」：It represents her sucking his cock deep into her throat.
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6.
弄りっこシーンも完成版は二人の興奮している様子がよくわかるようになったかなと思います。🥰
I think the finished version of the teasing scene also shows how excited the two of them are.🥰
Introduction of onomatopoeia
「シュッ」：It's the sound of her vigorously rubbing his cock.
「ポスッ」：That's the sound they make when they sink into bed.
「はっ」：It's the sound of his breath catching as she tweaks his cock.
「モニッ💛」：The sound of Eren's chest against Yuto's shoulder.
「ムキッ」：It's the sound of a foreskin being peeled off, exposing the glans.
「シコ💛」：It's the sound of her gently rubbing his cock.
「ぐちゅ くちゅ」：It's the sound of Ellen's wet shorts being groped.
「ねとっ」：It represents the sticky cowper on Yuto's briefs.
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7.
ごっくんシーンは背景が描かれてなかったので描き足しました。
カブトムシの幼虫みたいに丸まったかわいいちんちんはほおばりたくなりますよね…。😋
The background of the scene after the oral ejaculation was not drawn, so I added it.
The cute little cock curled up like a beetle larva makes me want to suck on it...😋
Introduction of onomatopoeia
「ゴクッ」：It's the sound of her slowly swallowing the semen from her mouth.
「ちゅぽん」：That's the sound of her removing his cock from her mouth.
「はーっ」「ひーっ」：It's the sound of taking a long breath.
「ダラッ」：It's the sound of drool and semen mixed together dripping down.
「かああああっ」：It represents the way her body is burning from the core.
「ドキドキ」：It's the sound of a fast beating heart.
「どろっ」：It's the sound of sticky semen flowing out of his cock.
「ビクン ビクンッ」「ビク…ビク…ビクン」「ひくひく」：It represents a quivering penis.
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8.
まぁちちゃんのまだ未成熟だけど大きくなりつつあるおっぱいと汁っ気たっぷりの茂みはよりエッチに仕上がったと思っています。😊
くびれになるほどお尻は大きくないけどオトナになってきてるんだよって主張してる体はホントえっちでいいですよね…！😉
In the finished version, March's still immature but growing breasts and juicy bush are more sexually appealing.😊
Her ass isn't big enough to be a neckline, but it's really nice to see her body asserting that she's becoming an adult...!😉
Introduction of onomatopoeia
「シュル」：It's the sound of shifting cloth.
「ポロン」：It represents the way her breasts are spilling out.
「はーっ はっ」：It's March's voice, breathing heavily with excitement.
「ムワッ」：It represents the way erotic feelings rise up as hot and steamy air.
「とろぉ…💛」：It's the sound of her love juices flowing out of her.
「プルン💛」：That's the sound of her tits shaking.
「バサッ」：It's the sound of a towel being torn off.
「ニチャ💛」：It's the sound her love juices make every time she moves, tangled in her thighs.
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9.
えれんちゃんの見せつけシーン。完成版はより汁気がましたかなと思います。
えれんちゃんの方が汁気が多いのはゆうと君との弄りっこのせいです。😚
成長し始めでつぼみのような乳首も本当にいいですよね…。大好きなものしか描かなくていいので本当にマンガって楽しいです。😆
Eren's show-off scene. I think the finished version has more juice.
The reason why Eren has more juice is because she was playing with Yuto.😚
The nipples that are just beginning to grow and look like buds are also really nice... I really enjoy manga because I only have to draw what I love.😆
Introduction of onomatopoeia
「ツン💛ツン💛」：It represents her tiny nipples standing up in excitement.
「んふふ～🎵」：Ellen's humming.
「キュン💛キュン💛」：It represents the tingling of Eren's womb.
「ファサ」：It's the sound of a towel being gently peeled away.
「トロォ～…」：It represents the sticky love juice dripping from between her legs.
「あ〃っあ〃っ…」：It's Yuto's hoarse voice.
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10.
今回初チラ見せはこちら
ゆうと君のちんちんが二人に弄ばれているシーンです。そんな3人の楽しい弄りっこを描いていますので発売日をお楽しみに！😆
Here is the first glimpse of the post.
This is the scene where Yuto's cock is being played with by the two girls. It's a fun scene of the three of them playing with each other, so look forward to the release date!😆
Introduction of onomatopoeia
「はっはっ💛」「はあっ💛」「はっ」：It represents that the person is excited and breathing hard.
「んふーっ」：It's the sound of him getting wrapped up in her tits and breathing through his nose.
「チュモ💛」：It's the sound of someone sucking on a tit.
「ツィーーッ」：It's the sound of her fingertips brushing his cock all at once.
「ツツツーーッ」：It's the sound of her fingertips slowly stroking his cock.
「ゾクゾクゾクッ」：It shows him shivering with pleasure.
「チュク💛」「チュ💛」「クチュ💛」「キュ💛」「ムチュ💛」：It's the sound of them playing with his cock.
「モミモミモミ…💛」：That's the sound of her kneading his balls.
「ツツツ」：It represents her gently tracing his cock to stimulate it.
「ゆうとクン💛 また… しゃせ～💛 しちゃいそ～かな？」：March's line ″Are you about to ejaculate again, Yuto?″
「モギュ モギュ💛」：It's the sound of her massaging his balls to make him feel better.
「シコシコシコシコシコ」：It's the sound of her vigorously rubbing his cock.
「ビク ビクッ」：It represents that he's starting to feel the need to ejaculate.
「キュウウウッ」：It's the sound of his balls being squeezed.
「あ〃っ…💛 あ〃あ〃っ…💛」：It's Yuto's gasp.
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11.
そして来月、三月からは今回のお話の後半を描いていくことになると思います。Pixivsketchなどでボクが描いているところを見かけたらお気軽に覗いてみてください。😉
Next month, in March, I'll start drawing the second half of this story.
If you see me drawing on Pixivsketch, please feel free to take a peek.😉
下の画像はその設計図に当たるネームです
単行本を見据えての作業になる関係で今のところ22pで制作しています。
そうインピオ単行本第2弾…少しずつ見えてきました。後半の作業が終わったらもしかすると単行本づくりが動き出すかもしれませんので続報をお楽しみにです！😆
The image below is the name, which is the blueprint.
I'm currently working on a 22-page story for the book.
So, the second volume of the Impio book... it's starting to come into view little by little. I may start working on the book when the second half of the work is done. It's still undecided, but look forward to more news!😆
今回の更新はこの辺で！次の作業もがんばりまーす！😊✨✨
That's it for this update! I'll work hard on the next one!😊✨✨
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タカハシノヲト
門倉さんコメありがとうございますー！ 毎回線画が描き終わったくらいで個人的には満足度がいったん上がりきるのですが、この仕上げまで到達するとそれがまだまだ中盤だったと再認識してしまいます。 やっぱりそのくらい自分で見ていても違いますね…！ 無事描ききれてホント良かったです！😊
今までの途中経過も面白かったけど、完成となると全体の雰囲気に厚みが加わった感じがして、やはり違いますね。浮かんだアイディアを最後のカタチに持っていけるってことは、何においても素晴らしいと思いますよ。
タカハシノヲト
モンターク仮面さんありがとうございますー！ 続きも良いものになるよう頑張りますよー！😉
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