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Death is a Suggestion 3. Grind for Days

🕑 Added 2024-09-13 00:53:21 +0000 UTC

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Marc Savage

The start of the story seems very quick. Maybe more character development to get to know the heroes before they snuff it of course

noct

Thank you!

noct

Thanks for the comment! I was wondering if something like this was necessary. He definitely isn't for everyone, but I could do a better job introducing him. Thank u! I'll poke around at adding something to the start.

Tom C

I uh, I’m not sure if something at the beginning of the story is needed to warm the MC to the reader? I understand and even agree with him, but he is incredibly unlikeable. I think it’s the holier than thou, I know everything attitude - even if he is right? He is a bit insufferable imo.

Marc Savage

Loving this so far. Would love to read more.


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