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127. Mana Veins

🕑 Added 2024-08-09 14:00:05 +0000 UTC

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David

Can't wait to see more of Mont! With the mage kicking tables and probably messing with his much-needed rest, hopefully that means he's also gunna fight. Tftc!

Tom C

“Ike snorted. “Are you afraid of baths?” “Only the healthy fear that should be shown to something that makes you weaker,” Wisp replied.” -> I am lost on what Wisp has said here…? Edit: ahhh I was breaking the sentence after “healthy” rather than “healthy fear” so I read it as only the healthy (people) fear that, and then from that it didn’t make any sense. But I get it now! Apologies Also, you describe a number of things as “wood” Wood floor Wood door Wood floor But when they get to the dining room you call the dining table an “oaken” table rather than oak, when the others weren’t “wooden”. Or non-specific wood? Maybe use hardwood as a slightly more specific descriptor, or use a colour descriptor for more clarity - wood flooring with reddish sheen or something? I dunno, but I felt this could be improved a bit since everything being described seems to be wood of some kind. Also thought Ike might have some sort of reaction to seeing a huge table cut from one piece of wood? Great ending to the chapter. I am loving Ike’s reactions to combat and enemies now! Sorry for the essay. Thanks for the chapter! 👍👏


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