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Memoirs 127 - Is it graverobbing if they're undead?

🕑 Added 2023-02-19 22:07:36 +0000 UTC

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Tin

One more grammar correction, “The lich let out an enraged scream that echoes across the room.” “echoes” -> “echoed”

Flameruner

The description was, in fact, just referring to the passing of time. Scarlett lamenting about the damage caused to it was supposed to be a separate issue, but that didn't entirely come through. Will change it to be a bit more clear.

Flameruner

Not at the moment, no. I have been considering setting one up eventually, but I'm unsure exactly when I will get to it.

Tin

I think you have the word here “spare” does not seem right “across the spare and engulfed its arm, leaving it black and charred as part of its robes was”

Guri Linus

When reading the description, I got a bit confused due to the wording talking about "fallen into disrepair": > {This robe was once made of fine fabrics and steeped in powerful magic, but has since gone fallen into disrepair. What remains of it is but a shadow of what it once was} Unless you really want to keep the description consistent, I'd consider something that mentioned the fire damage. At first I thought it was just time, until she started lamenting about how it was her fault.

Demerval Augusto da Cunha

tanks for the chap. do u have a discord?

Alpenmann

Thanks for the chapter. Time to grab everything that isnt nailed down.


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