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Memoirs 59 - The two princesses

🕑 Added 2022-07-01 18:48:23 +0000 UTC

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Flameruner

It is a pretty wordy sentence, isn't it? Thanks for the suggestion!

ParadoxFox

“I do not know if someone else has ever told you this, and I do not know if I am overstepping my bounds” I know Scarlett is kind of wordy, but I feel like it would be simpler to say, “I don’t mean to overstep”. It just feels a bit long for a parting comment. Overall, nice chapter, I suppose Scarlett is hated by nobility but the important people seem to like her.

John Brady Anderson

rns on its stalks." - the “ here should be removed as it comes at the end of internal description.

Richard David Reily

I believe the last few days has worn her done somewhat, but I am certain she will recovely --> I believe the last few days has worn her down somewhat, but I am certain she will recover "As long as everything is all right. And how is Evelyne?" --> "As long as everything is all right. How is Evelyne?" or "As long as everything is all right, how is Evelyne?"


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