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Chapter 183: Shapeshifting - Markets and Multiverses

🕑 Added 2023-12-08 07:30:25 +0000 UTC

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Rodmin

'Once the more unpleasant part of the conversation was over, the group chatted for a few more minutes, before I ended the group mental call. After all, there were other things I still needed to do.' That sentence sounded a bit weird to me, not in a big deal, but the end of last chapter already sounded like they ended the call, Anise going to breakfast because she was called and Sallia turning around in bed to go back to sleep, then they continue chatting for several more minutes? Maybe a little edit here or at the end of last chapter to make that a bit smoother.

Rain

TFC!


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