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Chapter 32 - A Budding Scientist in a Fantasy World

🕑 Added 2021-06-27 19:37:34 +0000 UTC

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ShadeByTheSea

Patreon lost my first post, but the gist of it was find a way to describe the experiments once, likely post testing when discussing it with a friend or mentor. Save describing the whole process, hypnosis, to figuring out how to test, etc for the really important or interesting discoveries. Doing these will make the story more enjoyable to read, not that it's not already enjoyable. I'll continue reading if it stays it's current way.

Todor

"I do wonder if it overstayed its welcome a bit..." Nope, not at all!

Rickard Gustavsson

Can we maybe get a complete overview, that is kept updated, of her status screen with all the perk details listed? Scrolling through so many chapters just to find the description to this and that perk because I forgot the specifics of it? tedious and annoying..

crusaderstar

It did overstay it's welcome for me, I think because it felt so unmoored from the world and the plot. There's been a lot of Alice musing inside her head and observing her mana (and the kids once), which has been isolating. I think I would've enjoyed this kinda thing more if she encountered magic phenomena out around town that inspired her, like witnessing guards do something or hearing about a creature from a merchant, etc. It's also possible I'm not your target reader, since while I like theory crafting, it has to affect characters / the plot pretty quickly for me to enjoy it. Delve for instance has a bad ratio of theory to plot for me. I know real science has tons of dead ends and refining hypotheses, but that isn't my favorite thing to read :P. Maybe you could intersperse that amongst character interactions / plot / exploring the world?

Katherine

To be fair, all outlines go off a bit when put into practice. Just try not to go too far off the rails.

D

Makes me wonder why there was no thought about basic interface. The small amount of mana could be used to interface to the source that holds/control's mana. Like the small amount of energy i am using to type this text or move my mouse. Its not me who does all the computing, its the pc. Just saying. ^^

Overstayed? Acaswell, those chapter felt like core of the story! Like everything else before them were just ~mindless filler for the sake of traditions, not very interesting and nor very relevant. I feel like i could read 15-20 more chapters in the same arc and not be bored or disappointed. In fact - im quite disappointed that it ended so soon! I want more Science! More nerdy ramblings! I dont wanna read about some stupid expedition or cults, gimme gimme gimme more experiments and observations and hypothesizing! It's the heart and core and soul of (my perception of) this story!


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