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Trap Online Chapter 198: Itching at it

🕑 Added 2023-12-26 09:09:06 +0000 UTC

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Madjic

Thank you, I will think about this. I might split it into two but am unsure at this point. If I do I will make a post about it.

ReclamerS117

First of all thank you for the chapter. I liked the general content but to me the pacing feels like you wanted to go fast forward but by accident pushed the button for 2X fast forward. For example Glooms heat in my opinion is a relatively big part of story and you wrote a lot about it. But in comparison to that in this chapter the ending of her heart and her getting back in track in my opinion feels to much like a side note. I'm not sure if this is helpful at all but maybe it would have bin better to put the content into two shorter chapters and go a bit deeper into the subjects. Well I hope my opinion is at least the slightest bit helpful to you and even if it's not I love and enjoy your storys and hope for many more in the future. Thanks for your time reading this comment and writing your wonderful storys and have a nice day.

Madjic

Sorry for the late chapter. I have been working on this for a while and just couldn't seem to get it exactly in the way I want. I would love feedback, but honestly, I just hope you enjoy it!


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