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Life of a Dominant Futanari Week 3 Chapter 102/34: Group Date Part 1

🕑 Added 2022-04-24 08:27:58 +0000 UTC

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Mr.Tiemos

To add, Tracy wasn’t seen redressing herself either, so it could be noted as or after Angela gets dressed. Also, in terms of the group’s interactions, you make it evident that there is an uncomfortableness between them, so less talking isn’t necessarily bad. Not like Angela is going to easily fix it either, as she’s not the most ‘people person’, and for good reason!

Madjic

Your right here. I will have to come back and do something about that. It's an inconsistency but I already have a fix for it in the back of my head now that you pointed it out. Thanks!

Mr.Tiemos

The interactions seem pretty good; nothing I could point out to critique as they seem normal- at least considering their wonky relationships. If anything I’m wondering when Angela got dressed considering she was supposedly in her underwear when eating and setting Tracy’s punishment up. Maybe I missed it after the latter?

Grangel

I think the group date is going good so far. Keep up the great work!!

Grangel

"I took the middle seat sitting between Alex and Sarah." 'Sarah' should be 'Tracey' since Sarah is sitting in the front passengers seat.

Han Pol

Well it's mostly a set up and for that it is working and pretty fun I think. and so far it seems to be fun and working of course I could see some drama happening. Some of the girls that don't know about one another will likely scoop out the competition or act a bit more daring to get her attention in a group setting. I'm looking forward to the next chapters, but can also understand that this is difficult to write. So as a suggestion even if everyone is around, it's likely better to focus on no more then 4-3 girls at a time. Better less and give the others even if they act as a group something else to do, be it watching or distracting potential onlookers in case they do something naughty in a public setting. I do some role playing, ((the no more then 3-4 girls at a time is something I mostly follow from that. Else the girls eather loose character, don't act naturally, the scene lacks detail, or the pace becomes to slow for a sexual scene. )) With a single point of view I would mostly focus on Angela and maybe reflect later on what else happens as she can't know it all.

Madjic

Hey guys, Sorry for the wait on the chapter. This was another difficult chapter and I am not sure about it. I actually could really use some serious feedback about this chapter. I am unsure about the interactions since I have been so tired lately. I think they are at least okay but I think I have been thinking about them too long and lost sight. Thanks and Enjoy!


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