A Forest Where the Rain Goes Up | 19 |
🕑 Added 2021-11-22 01:53:08 +0000 UTCA bit of a shift, don't worry though x3
The page has a black outline on purpose. Sorry if it's a little confusing hopefully in a page or two it will be more clear I hope.
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Cuddly Canine
Oh that makes more sense, Fudge is new to having a role. And he is counted as a carnivore, so the claws make sense though I would have thought only Legosi files them down quite as tiny. Thanks.
SpiritD
Yeah you would be right, and sorry if it's a little confusing, I'll try to not use close ups as much, I can see how in some areas they wouldn't be the best especially with no colour making it harder for people to tell who is who. As for page 17 that is Fudge tugging on Louis's shirt asking him about some pointers, you can see him sitting on Louis's right in other pages and carrying around the script. He is just very nervous about performing ^^ I do hope it will be more clear in a page or two what is going on atm, ideally two. Thank you so much for the input!
Cuddly Canine
I have to agree with the others that the other panels are somewhat confusing. Had to go back to page 16 to see how Louis and Legosi sit together. On page 17 the tugginng and notebook panels are supposed to be Legosi and Louis too, right? There's nothing wrong with your closeups, they are great, but if you love them too much, it's easy for the reader to lose sight of the bigger picture where everyone currently is in the scene. Nothing too bad so far and I'm sure the next page will give context to what happened here anyway. (Assuming Louis didn't "let one rip" here)
Cuddly Canine
Two tickets to some kind of bug exhibition I'm guessing? Very nice.
SpiritD
Exactly as planned >:3
CountinSheep
First five panels: confusion. Last panel: completely distracted by Legoshi's puppy reactions. Artistic sleight of hand.
SpiritD
Love the pun there xD And yeah you can always pm me about it if you want.
Sascha
Plot Twist! There always hazbin two Louis HAHA I actually have a theory. Do you want me to keep it a secret? In case that I'm correct so that I don't spoil it for other people.
SpiritD
Thaaank you <3 This one was a little tricky to figure out how to draw. Btw so happy you like Legoshi's expression there!
SpiritD
I don't want to say anything yet x3, but don't worry it's not his long lost twin brother!
Sascha
Do I see 2 Louis there? What is happening 0.0?
Sirom
Daamn the shadow effects and linework are amazing. :D I still can't get over how epic the last panel is here xD. You captured Legoshi's expression so good here!