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[Skill-Eater 3] Chapter 10: Settlement in Flux

🕑 Added 2025-06-20 17:00:07 +0000 UTC

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Dahlilamma

“tacking a mountain of tasks” I think you mean “tackling”

Bryan Dickerson

thanks for the awesome feedback. I'll take a look. We learn who they are a little later.

D. Kaipo Kailiawa

"As Sakura crossed the districts, her thoughts turned to the only five people on Ord she trusted, including two friends from her homeworld who had been banished at the same time as herself." So i was expecting an intro / explanation of the two homeworld friends after this comment but was sadly disappointed after receiving only a rehash of the 3 pillars which seems a bit odd placement as Sakura herself is one of the pillars and then a reintro to her synopsis of Edge. Might be a good idea to revisit this in editing mode and rearrange the placement a bit... i.e. expound on the 3 pillars immediately after the previous comment early on in the chapter that mentioned it, then a modified version of the comment above with synopsis of Edge and maybe at least a little bit more of a description of the homeworld buddies or at least a hint or maybe just leave them out altogether if they serve no other purpose or mention later in the story, cuz now my mind is gonna constantly remember these mysterious 2 friends everything Sakura is mentioned! Spare a poor guy some grief please! 🙇🙏

Bryan Dickerson

thank you!

Robert McCarter

Fun! Thank you for a fun chapter. It's nice to learn more about Sakura. :-) Minor typo: " The muzzles the turrets’ barrels swung around" - I think there's an extra "the"? Maybe this is what you meant? I wasn't sure, and it seemed awkward.


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