Curse of Destiny - Chapter 16 - Beach Bunny (1/3)
🕑 Added 2024-08-29 08:00:04 +0000 UTCValentina and Destiny are back at the beach where they run into Andy. The young man invites Destiny to join him and his friends at a game of beach soccer.
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Nino Heđi
3 part chapter is ideal actualy it's neither too long or too short. Dustin is sentenced to 1 year of home detention so whether you like or not you'll have to speed some things up because you don't have a lot of options if you're keeping up with timeline you set at the beginning of the story. Story is great so far. Everything that happened to Dustin/Destiny so far is result of 4-6 months of Valentina's work so you don't have a lot of space.
Cassie Rose Watson
I'm trying to make the chapters as short as possible without taking away from the story ❤️ There are a few shorter chapters coming up which should speed things along.
Cassie Rose Watson
Haha she might be downplaying her affection for him a little 😉 Yes the first page caption was wrong. Fixed now ❤️
Nino Heđi
I don't want to rush good story but i think it's perfect time for Valentina to put Destiny's training in higher gear. This is second time pace slows down a bit. Try not to do it too many times or this story will be too long. This story will probably have 25-30 chapters the way i see and i might be wrong so try not to make chapters no more than 3 parts long. So far it's good.
Taigan
Oooh! I like where this is going! “He’s alright, I guess” is code for “I get great orgasms fantasizing about him.” 😂 Should the first page say “a few days after the doctors examines Destiny?”