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AMSL Ch: 5

🕑 Added 2025-01-24 21:00:05 +0000 UTC

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M. Lampi

Regardless of the typos, I feel that this chapter is a pretty good rendition of what an initial impression of moving into a London suburb would be like - except there was no mention of the mashed peas one typically gets along with the fish and chips. :-)

M. Lampi

Little Wining was quite possibly the quietest place ==> Little Winging was quite possibly the quietest place It was a small village in the Surry region of England. ==> It was a small village in the Surrey region of England. "before stopping in front of a house that had recently taken down a ‘For Sale’ sign." Umm ... how does one known that the For Sale sign was recently been taken down if it isn't there? "His father had to giggle a bit to unlock it," -- That's an interesting incantation. Perhaps you meant this: "His father had to jiggle the key a bit to unlock it," We'll be ruffing it the next few days, ==> We'll be roughing it the next few days, “But you have to ice in your soda,” Hailee stated as if it were fact. ==> “But you have to have ice in your soda,” Hailee stated as if it were fact. “Really, mam, it’s fine. ==>. “Really, ma'am, it’s fine. Again, their father paused at the door to giggle the lock open ==> Again, their father paused at the door to jiggle the lock open "I'm happy then, but where are my manors," Across the street, perhaps? ;-) I think you meant "I'm happy then, but where are my manners," almost like it could sense his weariness. ==> almost like it could sense his wariness. mother scolded their father for his lude behavior in front of them. ==> mother scolded their father for his lewd behavior in front of them.

Holly Harris

Pretty sure it’s supposed to be “jiggle”, but it does sound a bit like an Alice in Wonderland type of lock if you need to giggle it open. 😂

Grappleshot

Training arc. Also I never heard about the verb giggle applied to a lock.

austin kutz

No need to worry about spoiling the Harry Potter books. Anyone that was going to read them has read them already


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