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AMSL Ch: 3

🕑 Added 2025-01-22 21:00:04 +0000 UTC

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Carl Mason

Terminal 9-3/4 is an interesting idea.

Lord Porkalust

The pacing is Good.

M. Lampi

I live in Bellevue (just across the lake from Seattle). Yes, we sometimes get snow, but it's only on rare occasions that it lasts more than a couple of hours or is more than a light dusting. Once every few years we get a big storm, but that's really uncommon. Tacoma has pretty much the same weather as it's only roughly 30 miles south and at the same elevation and proximity to Puget Sound.

Kosnik4

Thanks for all the suggestions. I have family in Tacoma, and I could've sworn they get snow, but I'll take your word for it. Thanks for commenting.

M. Lampi

Anyway, the pacing is fine so far. The mysterious wall hiding the other people is curious. Will it come back in the story line later?

M. Lampi

Also, SEA-TAC is the name of the Seattle airport, or Seattle-Tacoma International Airport, not Seattle International Airport.

M. Lampi

Typo: Boxes instead of Poxes: mailed off the twenty poxes meant for their new home

M. Lampi

Tacoma doesn't get much snow - ever - so "At one point, one man was moments away from tears, wailing about having to shovel his driveway this winter." is a bit confusing to me. Now, if this was someplace closer to the mountains or on the other side of the Cascades it would be a different story.

Holly Harris

Pacing feels good, but I’m also excited for the meeting harry and going to hagwarts parts!! He’s gonna flip when he figures out which set of powers he actually got.

Scott Fellman

The pacing is fine I find these chapters really building up the family dynamics

Grappleshot

I see the cultivator comparison when I read the line that he was circulating his energy.

Snowmad

With the length of the chapters the pacing is good if you were to cut them down then it would feel a bit slow. I'm not the biggest Harry Potter fan but I watched the movies. I am still interested to see where the story goes from here. TFTC

Jonathan

twenty poxes meant for their new home I've heard of wishing 'a pox on your house' (originally 'plague'), but twenty seems excessive, and why would they do it to themselves?

austin kutz

Pacing is good, no need to rush the introductory phase


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