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Ch: 4 Rewrite

🕑 Added 2023-03-05 07:25:39 +0000 UTC

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Matt S.

I really don't like her, haha. I know you tried to make her less like a psychotic control freak that rejects everything that isn't following her wishes later on after the fight with her daughter, but still I find it hard to read chapters with her. 😅 That being said, I like your story and most other characters. :)

heh

how pail she looked -> how pale she looked

Alex C

Out of my Site>sight

Kireina

as I move from [undeath->underneath] our covers

Tyler Machado

You misspell her name at least 3 other times as well. Keep it up.

Tyler Machado

Also of my man mixed with the forest; to me, it always smelled of the perfect mix of man and beast. Oh well, I’ll wait until Aalyiah's (Aaliyah's two; then, maybe I might

MikeL

Also site to sight,

Stephen Pearson

how [pail->pale] she looked


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