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Ch: 2 Rewrite

🕑 Added 2023-03-04 05:10:07 +0000 UTC

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Jonathan

It's official; I'm going crazy, and it wasn't even because I died and was reborn. No, I was going crazy because I'd been lying here for two months and was incredibly bored with nothing to do but stare up. It's and I'm, present tense. Rest of the two sentences, past tense. Ok, breathe; I try to get ahold of emotions before I accidentally start crying. Again. Back to present tense. And so on throughout the chapter, although this one appears to be mostly present. I think chapter one was mostly past.

Robin

"I try to get ahold of emotions before I accidentally start crying. Again." a hold not ahold (AFAIK)

Robin

"experience reequipment goes up by 25% after each level" requirement?

TAMSC

I love this series so far. Gotta say though, kinda frustrating how patreon is only a couple chapters ahead instead of 12+.

Adama

foul me => fool me

Kosnik4

Thanks for all those.

Bookmaggot

Dippers to Diapers, Fateher to Father, Mussels to muscles, epidemy to epitome. Those are the errors I noticed


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