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Chapter 152: Thank You For Your Generous Donation

🕑 Added 2022-08-18 05:01:01 +0000 UTC

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Maggie

Same for me

dat guy

Thanks for the chapter! typo cieling -> ceiling Also, something happened so that chapter 151 was not unlocked on Friday night (Saturday morning for me) but it was just released on Royal Road. Chapter 152 just showed up for me here on Patreon, but 151 is still locked for me.

Max Lopo

"I am sorry, but where in this chapter is rape even mentioned?". Nowhere. Someone is trying to stretch a useless social study degree, you can easily tell by the use of the word "triggering'. I would say it's a troll, but I've learned not to attribute bad intentions to something that could be explained by sheer idiocy. The good news is that therapists abound where this problems occur. Usually in cities near oceans. Weird coincidence.

I think the Theophania / Tiff has been inspired by CGP Grey^^ Very cute

Zurulean

I am sorry, but where in this chapter is rape even mentioned?

Max Lopo

......why are the children INSIDE when the show is outside? It's like driving your kids to the fair and then lock them in the car, so they can HEAR everyone else having fun. Kinda evil.

CentaureHeart

I don't really see why you're so offended. The situation was not treated lightly, it was foreshadowed before, and I doubt this is going to come up much over the rest of the story. People are not supposed to enjoy such scenes. At least one person has been murdered in this story so far. This is fiction, authors play with different situations to build their characters. Yes rape is disgusting and it can bring up trauma but so does any other physical/mental torture, abuse or murder. You may not like it and you have every right to not want to read a story like that, but being sanctimonious about it brings nothing.

.m

This chapter offended me to the point I'm canceling my Patreon and if this appears on Royal Road I'll give the story a one star review and comment on its insensitive insertion of rape for a completely redundant plot point (Tori feels mad now...after a school collapses on children). Web fiction is always a waste of time but usually a pleasurable waste of time, with an immersion into the story setting leading to emotional resonance and a moment of escape. This chapter took a bathetic sledgehammer to my immersion in the story, and also undoes the author's character development. I understand that the only "real" character in the chapter is Tori, but her perspective had been growing to be loftier, concerning itself with more than petty fights with Dimitri. The author may have realized having a Mary Sue have everything going well was bland to read, but a natural path out of that would have been to introduce obstacles into the character's path, not to give them a coma-dream of no lasting import except for riled up emotions. I think using the event of rape as a sympathy troll is monstrous, triggering, and wholly unnecessary to advance the plot in the direction of "we feel indignant" when Hart and companys' antics in the "real" timeline have been so offensive. Like, this is a torture porn insert chapter that only serves to weakly justify a shift in character personalities because the writer boxed themselves into a corner by eliminating all natural conflict in the story. And putting it immediately after the author already created a situation with the same implications for plot arc is like, hideous.

Morgan

I'm thinking it's rather convenient that Tori had a chance to play the hero, the building falling at such a time giving her a chance to play the hero is rather auspicious... Perhaps as she was walking through the building earlier she weakened the foundations... Thats my guess

Sierra Saldierna

Yeah- you don't fuck around when it comes to the old gods... seems they where watching the blessing dance as well.

Lou Gar

You know, thinking about it, as soon as I read that Piers has 'conveniently' been taken out of the picture with duties, and Axton with him, I know there was going to be a 'chicanery,' but Wow! Can't wait to find out what comes of this.

Dragon Gate

Hell yeah, it´s a Hatrick! 1.Hart is discreditet!(In such a public Venue there i sno weaseling out of it or god forbid blame Tori) 2. Guthry is discreditet(even further lol) 3. Rossiek is discreditet fo providing bad labour and subpar materials There must be a Reckoning!!!

Torauth

First accusation - Tori sabotaged building. Moment that is proved garbage it will be Tori's fault because she took all the good raw materials. Once that is disproved it will be Tori's fault the labour was poor.

Lou Gar

Yeah, that was my though. Nimble fingered orphans would be my worry, and remember the speculation that the orphans might be fertile grounds to become spies against the empire. That could be the start of a plot device, or intro to a sub-plot.

Lou Gar

Legally, it is unlikely that there will be any sort of case against her, particularly as she is a Contessa (and you don't move against high nobles in a feudal society unless there is lots of evidence and strong political will). However, there is lots and lots of evidence against Dimitry, and his father's enemies are already circling. However, It is possible Tori could be tried in the court of public opinion. Tori already mentioned that there are people who are waiting for an opportunity to attack her from that angle, which is why she did not publicly fight her being drafted for the dance. She just took petty, and 'expensive' for Dimitri, revenge.

Mike

She moved dirt with crystals… how does a building inspector conclude faulty workmanship? Are their foundational issues? I think it’s in the realm of possibility for a court to be presented with two sides of a story. Gideon being there makes me question the imperial knights ability to act appropriate. He is susceptible to Alessa’s cone of confusion.

gedas

Nah she's surrounded by imperial knights 1 call away from the imperial family and any inspection will readily show that the building was poorly built no way any 1 is arresting her, not after she got crystal fatigue saving those orphans in front of everyone.

Different Nick

She might lose the bracelet. She's unconscious and its in her left hand, not attached to the wrist.

Brett Hayes

you know... people have been mentioning that Tori's put on weight... now she dances at a building opening and brings down the house... maybe some lean cuisine is in order... Hart might suggest it as the cause ;o)

Keith

She's surrounded by Royal knights who's going to steal anything?

Lou Gar

Well, looks like Tori will miss her opening after all. Also, there is a possibility that some of her possessions will go 'missing' in the confusion.

Mike

I’m worried that Tori is passed out and surrounded by haters. She could wake up and be arrested for the sabotage of orphanage. On the opening day of her store something or someone is going to throw shade. It was incredibly irresponsible for her to attend an event held by social antagonists without support.


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