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SSD 4.69 - Interlude - The City of Pearl Waters

🕑 Added 2024-05-03 20:12:54 +0000 UTC

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Tor Fridtjov Dahl

//The city of Eutomne was mostly contained within an enormous sea cave.// Last chapter Sevso mentioned that they were 'ultimately' heading towards a city with a different name, but it wasn't clear if he was referring to this city beyond the mountain tunnel, or a city further out still which confused me. It would be nice if you could elaborate a bit more earlier on what their route will look like. //Even though he paid for his apprentice in other coin, I don’t think there was even one of us who didn’t envy him.// It's unclear what 'other coin' is supposed to mean in the context of this paragraph. //the streets full with the overlapping weight of years *spent* surviving on my own,// //Each street -rise-*rose* slightly higher above the water,// //“Some* *things are better experienced without having them spoiled.”// //The ‘inn’ took up a large section of *the* street.// //A large building -made- was at the center, and the smell of food permeated the air long before we reached it. Around it were pathways and manicured gardens, leading -both- to a large carriage house situated mostly out of sight,// //Is this better or worse than trading an apprenticeship for sex?// Ahh, so that's what the 'other coin' was supposed to be referring to. That means it should be //he paid for his apprentice*ship* in other coin// I wondered why the text suggested the smith was paying the apprentice in other coin. //Now, absent the overwhelming fire of Otga and Shur-a-*u*m, // //but the occasional embedded crystals threw back the light as spec*k*s of phantasmal fire.//

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Aww poor boy maybe he'll get an Adar boyfriend once at the soul dungeon


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