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EG Monster Island Chapter 12

🕑 Added 2021-04-26 03:01:54 +0000 UTC

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That was supposed to be in reference to the last line of the previous chapter where he thought he wanted to "sleep for a week". Might just take it out

I'll definitely look into that, thanks!

Even with the speed Aiden is advancing, there is very little chance he'd make it to Core before 17 (there's going to be a couple of time-skips at some point to make it better). Typically the last two stages of Condensation take 6 months to a year to get through by themselves, and then moving into Seed Core takes another year to get it right. There are exceptions, but usually those are in a bad way. (i.e. it is possible to advance to Seed Core very quickly, but you will be one of the weakest at your level and have no chance of advancing past that. Some people do it, but they usually are just seeking the range of a Seed Core gatherer for growing plants or controlling animals, rather than combat ability)

Micke Andersson

"I didn’t sleep for a week." - was easily misread, I did at first. Maybe add a "get to" there, as in "I didn't get to sleep for a week"?

I thought about that but it could be construed as deference to the Princess. I was interested in the fact that she had zero lines in this chapter after turning in the worst team result of the group.

Is there a conflict between these two passages about Lea (both happening the same day)? "I managed to strain my center, and now cannot train for the rest of the day,” Lea grumbled from the other side of the large table. Vaya and Lea both got big eyes, then tried something to test their abilities." This comes from the afternoon training.

It references the groups as condensation & Core teams, shouldn't it be by age as Aidens team could make core before they are 17, so maybe other teams could as well?

Scott Walker

Now he's HAS to invent the light saber. A rune for continuous supply of aether for the blade and a rune limiting the distance.

Tsering

When Kamiski tell them their ranks, souldn’t she say Mings rank (fifth) bevor the princesses rank (ninth)?


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