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EG Monster Island Chapter 8

🕑 Added 2021-03-29 03:14:41 +0000 UTC

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victoria bettley

Liked the extra information about the government structure. I remembered they mentioned that the ambassador would teach them about customs of the Ashkhas to save embarrassment but it wasn't mentioned during the journey if that happened? Also has it been mentioned how the other teams got there or who made it?

Tom Richards

I think this sentence needs to be changed slightly "the first building visible behind the wall was a massive dome, rising up like the Taj Mahal from an awesome looking palace" ... I think the similarity to the Taj Mahal should be noted first otherwise it calls into question whether the whole of the Taj Mahal is a part of this new palace and such . . . So, "the first building visible behind the wall was a massive dome, like the Taj Mahal rising up from an awesome looking palace". And there's a typo, when referring to the up and coming election, "Yes there are" should be "Yes they are" Perhaps change it so it says "it was requested that they share a room with one another" instead of "one other" giving the impression that the team is staying together, where as before hand I thought it might mean one other group.

Ryan

Is the Air wolf supposed to be a Wind Wolf that the boy was chasing

oops, thanks!

You'll find out next week!

I would be curious to know which other teams of the upper tiers made it to the tournament? Obviously at least 1 team from Azyl.

"almost like the wolf 0was a dog" don't think the 0 should be in there.

Name suggestion: Struan Donnachaidh


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