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EG Monster Island Chapter 2

🕑 Added 2021-02-08 03:28:22 +0000 UTC

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It was stated that counselor Silas told aiden about being woken an hour before, but he told his bunkmates that it was librarian narwan. (Enjoying the tale so far!)

Joe

There is some flow issue slash typo on the paragraph starting with "not necessarily". The sentence about the gathering technic will be harder doesn't flow right

Thanks!

Ben Semmes

It should be the word "suppleness" instead of supplety

Counsilor Sila is on the ship?

Micke Andersson

Not if Librarian Narwan is a designation. A title.

Names: Lu’dmila, Lubov’, Svetlana, Svetoslav, Yaroslav, Matvei, Vladimir. The sign ‘ is to indicate Soft Consonant

"I had embedded the shield inscription LIbrarian Narwan had taught me in." The I in librarian should be lower case. I agree with Jakob was confused with the Counsilor Sila mention in the book for a minute

Librarian

Also Counsilor Sila is misplaced. Should be Liberian Narwan.

Tanstaafl

Great work. You might want to change peak to peek in "noticed Vaya peak up at him "


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