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Plan for the Galaxy Chapter 54

🕑 Added 2024-07-11 15:19:11 +0000 UTC

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Eva Cole

Great chapter! I will say that even though I get why shepard may have reacted the way she did, he's still done so much for her just to in a sense betray his trust yet again. I want her to think for herself but is kaidan going to be able to help her out like she needs? Also is Brock calling the council and doing it for her yet again really her doing it herself or just making Brock do all the difficult work for her? She can't have it both ways where she thinks for herself but then makes Brock do it for her but get mad. At this point I think he should stay completely professional and not treat her like a friend cause she doesn't deserve it in my mind. And to be honest I think it kind shows poor leadership skills cause with how much he's liked was it worth letting kaidan once again run his mouth with unreasonable demands and have the unity in the crew be messed up? I'm curious what Williams is thinking?

Andr

Can not wait for the next chapter

Jason Bourne

I think shepherd reaction about alenko's suspicious it's right. brook is overly competent, if something don't go the way he want it's really weird, like now. and shepherd sees that to. shepherd can trust brook but she also can see and think for herself. for me you did right

Bored Peasant

Thanks for that. Changes have been made.

sonic

Hey, this chapter came out surprisingly well, really good pacing. It came to a very satisfying end.

Ezoz

Probably the best way you could have both moved Brock off the Normandy and brought the simmering conflict of Brock and Kaden to a head. Side note typo in paragraph 3 of Brock POV. Also you put down Jurt instead of Wrex when Brock is meeting the aliens when leaving the ship.

Randall Cook

IMO you did decently on the interaction. I'm guessing story wise you wanted Brock off the Normandy for the next part. And you found a non-contrived/cringe way to do it.

Oda The Toaster

First, also good chapter! continue the good work!


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