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eBook 3 now available on Amazon!

🕑 Added 2018-04-14 14:30:56 +0000 UTC

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Mac of Alden

Is there a timeframe for when this becomes a physical paperback book? Really enjoyed the other two.

Jedi Khan

It's linked now. Probably was just a delay on Amazon's part.

Jedi Khan

Amazon supposedly should auto-update the ebooks, so that if the author puts out an update, the readers who have bought it automatically get it as well. There's a setting somewhere in the Kindle account settings for that, I think.

"And now I know the rest of the story". Thanks Tef.

Tefler

The Drakkar is reaching out with its two top arms, begging her for mercy. Jade swipes across, tearing through both limbs at the elbow (rather than completely removing both upper arms at the shoulder joint).

Tefler

I checked my master document and "wait don't" should be in normal quotation marks, because she says it out loud. I vaguely remember that being pointed out before for eBook 2, so I corrected it with an updated version. You might need to download a new version of the ebook (sorry, I'm not sure how that works exactly.)

Heinz Molck

Tefler, there is an inconsistency with respect to telepathy. In chapter 13 Alyssa thinks to John: " wait don't " at the pool when John is about to let her float on her own. And in chapter 25 John "hears" Alyssa for the first time: " I heard you " John thought in amazement.

I have an inconsistency that you may already be aware of. In book 3 during the fight in engineering when jade turned tiger for the first time. Her second kill has this. "It lashed out with a heavy paw and the ethereal-looking claws ripped effortlessly through the alien's forearms, the swipe severing both upper limbs. " How does one paw slice both upper limbs without slicing the torso?

oldman64

Check this site out it has a built in editing tool. <a href="https://owl.english.purdue.edu/" rel="nofollow noopener" target="_blank">https://owl.english.purdue.edu/</a>

Tefler

I submitted a new eBook version, so hopefully that should be up in a day or two! Thanks very much to everyone who pointed out typos and errors. :-)

Tefler

Some great edits there, thank you! "to no end" is the american version of "no end". In the UK you wouldn't include the 'to'. Interesting about the misplaced modifiers, I'll try not to do that in the future. :-)

Tefler

It should be linked, but I'm not sure why the link isn't working. Hopefully it might update next time I do an updated version.

Tefler

Ah, well spotted, thank you! :-)

Tefler, I just found another typo. She came to a halt right next to him, brushing her legs again his and gazing up at his face with a challenging look in her eyes. Tefler, M. The John Blake Chronicles - volume 3: Voyage of Discovery (The Unclaimed Legacy Series Book 1) (Kindle Locations 8752-8753). Kindle Edition. Should be AGAINST??? of the Trader's Tmporium Tefler, M. The John Blake Chronicles - volume 3: Voyage of Discovery (The Unclaimed Legacy Series Book 1) (Kindle Location 8954). Kindle Edition. Should be EMPORIUM???

PLRus--Founding member of the TSM F5 club.

And the other two are still in the top 6

PLRus--Founding member of the TSM F5 club.

Both.

Cignal

Congratulations Tefler on being a #1 Best Seller. Amazon has Volume 3 listed as their #1 Best Seller in Science Fiction Erotica.

PLRus--Founding member of the TSM F5 club.

Okay....here goes.....all the things I saw in ebook 3....btw...loved it! saw Sparks look of bewilderment------------Spark's endearing with it, that-------------------no comma needed. It actually pauses the sentence instead of going with the flow. then he watched as the girls settling down to their meal. -----------------settled or take out the word as. watching as she spread her legs for him invitingly-------------misplaced modifier ....as she invitingly spread her legs for him. "Fuckkk!" she wailed, as her malleable body-------------this is hard to read because it is unpronouncable...perhaps Fuuuuck would be better? "I was more than happy to help you, Dana," the Nymph said with a warm smile.----------------Jade is still talking about herself in the third person at this point....perhaps “This one was more than happy? "It would be my pleasure, Dana," -------------this one's?.....I notice the incongruity several times so I will not mention it again. Here are a few more things to look at on Ebook 3 uld have be born on a fes----------been? up from its grown to its exposed-------------------groin? before curling back into her mouth sensually, as if beckoning------sensually refers to curling so to put back into her mouth between the two words is to create what is called a misplaced modifier...........perhaps it should read: “before sensually curling back into her mouth.” his face, looking into his eyes searchingly----------same issue here......looking searchingly embraced him fiercely.------------------same issue.....fiercely embraced He opened his arms invitingly--------------------same issue.............invitingly opened. Jade stroked Dana's stomach soothingly as-------------same issue.......................soothingly stroked was sharing with her so benevolently.-------------same issue.................so benevolently sharing , looking at each of them lovingly--------------same issue................looking lovingly at each of them. time centring yourself the-----------------------centering such an incredible close battle.--------incredibly as she posed for him coquettishly.-----------------same issue.............coquettishly posed When we clear up that mess in the corridor, we'll need-------------clear out or clean up? squeeze her firm asscheek roughly----------------misplaced modifier...........she is roughly squeezing her firm asscheek. Hopefully Calara does not have a rough asscheek...LOL her muscles yielding for him willingly--------------------misplaced modifier ............her muscles willingly yielding or her willing muscles yielded..............we can assume John is willing :-), true, but with another noun before the modifier it reads a little choppy. into the submissively girl held down ------------------------submissive "You're look like you’re about to drop, Sparks,-------------You John leaned down to kiss Calara and tasting Dana on her lips. "Perfect."--------------and tasted or replace and with a comma. then stroking it gently.-----------either clit, gently stroking it or then gently stroked it. plush lips and she sucked on him mindlessly as------------mindlessly sucked...he is not mindless, she is...misplaced modifier. young flesh yielding for him willingly.----------------misplaced modifier ..........young flesh willingly yielding for him. Or young willing flesh yielding for him. (depending on if flesh is willing or willing modifies the level of yielding.) turning her on no end.---------------to no end. (yes, split infinitive but wide usage makes it acceptable. and she beamed at him happily-------------------beamed happily.......him is not happily, the beam is (misplaced modifier) girls who waited for him patiently at the -------------------------patiently for him.....waited is being modified by patiently so they need to be together instead of separated by another noun. grav-tube, so they---------the comma creates a pause that then can cause confusion where no pause is necessary. was flung backwards, peppered with round.------------------rounds clean kicking in and leave him scrubbing for hours.----------------and leaving him or kicking in, leaving him excited him no end and-------------------to no end? simmering away happily on the oven.--------------in the oven or on the stove? Progress, whilst maintaining their low energy profile nice.----------------delete nice splitting its astonished face horizontally down the middle.----------horizonally across? Dana gasped, spreading her toned athletic thighs for him welcomingly---------misplaced modifier......she was welcomingly spreading her thighs. The inclusion of a prepositional phrase between the two creates a hesitancy in the reader's mind as they have to think back to which word it is modifying. shirt to stroke her toned stomach suggestively----------------suggestively stroke....the stroke was suggestive, not her stomach. silvery cloth was slowly up and back,---------------pulled? Raised?

Evan

John, I've also sent email to that account, but I'm not sure that it's being received. That's why I've been posting in the comments, here, myself.

PLRus--Founding member of the TSM F5 club.

Tefler, I sent several emails to your Malif.... account with suggested corrections to the ebook.

Jedi Khan

Tef, just a quick note, it doesn't look like book 3 is linked to the others as a series on the US version of Amazon. Books 1 and 2 are linked, but 3 is not.

Tefler

Thanks for those, I've fixed them in my master document and I'll upload a new version.

Hey. Tef. another typo when John released her from his gasp. Tefler, M. The John Blake Chronicles - volume 3: Voyage of Discovery (The Unclaimed Legacy Series Book 1) (Kindle Locations 6109-6110). Kindle Edition. Think it should be GRASP???

Deryck Stevenson

Hi anyone know when 102 will be released?

Hey. Tef. another typo Soon everyone's hands were running over her wonderful tanned skinned, Tefler, M. The John Blake Chronicles - volume 3: Voyage of Discovery (The Unclaimed Legacy Series Book 1) (Kindle Locations 5665-5666). Kindle Edition. should be SKIN?

Evan

It’s a busy time, but I’ve finished my initial review of eBook #3. I very much enjoyed all the changes. It was definitely worth re-reading! Thank you, Tefler!

Orthen

Chapter 25 and 26 have overlapping times. The beginning of ch 26 plays at the time, John and Calara are on their way to the analysts. location 3871 and location 4204 are at the same time.

Evan

Location 7286: It references a purple ship not being covered in black armour plating, but rather in dark grey plates. I'm just confused over how the ship is purple?

Hey Tef, Is Tyrenium used in plasma cores or the lattice for the Singularity drive. I am only asking since I started rereading the first ebook and in the first chapter it stated that Tyrenium was used in plasma cores but I thought I recalled that it was used in the lattice surrounding the Artificial Black hole...

Evan

Location 7178: "make steady progress, whilst maintaining their low energy profile nice" -> "make steady progress, whilst maintaining their low energy profile nicely" or "make steady progress, whilst maintaining their low energy profile" or however you think it best phrased properly.

Evan

Location 7029: Episilon-Eridani system -> Epsilon Eridani system, I believe.

Yes congratulations on 2000 subscribers

Grimlakin

Wow that's huge!!

Kin Asdi

He Tefler congrats! You’re number one on amazon’s bestseller list!

Evan

Location 4954: "entranced by the spectacular orbs and impeccable spheres of their youthful overseer possessed" - should probably be either: "entranced by the spectacular orbs and impeccable spheres that their youthful overseer possessed" or "entranced by the spectacular orbs and impeccable spheres possessed by their youthful overseer" or "entranced by the spectacular orbs and impeccable spheres of their youthful overseer" - in order to read properly. Personally, I prefer the last one, but however you choose to word it is fine, of course.

Evan

Location 4055, "dropships removed from the hull and moved out the way." -> "dropships removed from the hull and moved out of the way." No?

Went to buy and found that they are still kindle only. Sorry, won't be buying that.

Evan

Around location 3530 in the eBook, it reads: “John’s didn’t sound amused as he asked,” - I’m guessing that that should have been either “John’s voice didn’t sound” or “John didn’t sound”, no?

morris ridgeway

Thank you for the links.

Timbo

Yep, good old British expression, that.... Means making far more of some task than is needed, if the job was done efficiently...

Tefler, I found a typo, here it is the Nymph stroked Alyssa tummy, Tefler, M. The John Blake Chronicles - volume 3: Voyage of Discovery (The Unclaimed Legacy Series Book 1) (Kindle Location 2017). Kindle Edition. Alyssa should be ALYSSA'S. ; One more Ayssa Tefler, M. The John Blake Chronicles - volume 3: Voyage of Discovery (The Unclaimed Legacy Series Book 1) (Kindle Location 2388). Kindle Edition. should be ALYSSA ; followed Tefler, M. The John Blake Chronicles - volume 3: Voyage of Discovery (The Unclaimed Legacy Series Book 1) (Kindle Location 4104). Kindle Edition. should be FOLLOWING. ;

Kim Biel-Nielsen

There is also recurring event in chapter 25 + 26 about John and Alyssa arriving as well as Jade doing flight training.

Evan

Tefler, in location 805, it says: “making such a meal of the demonstration’ - is that a British colloquialism? I’m more familiar with the use of the word ‘deal’ in that circumstance, rather than ‘meal’ as you have it. In location 1071, it says: “should have be born” instead of “should have been born” in reference to Dana. I’ll add more notes as I continue reviewing, however, it would be helpful to know what sections are new, if possible.

Kim Biel-Nielsen

You should also add a “featured tag” with links to the ebooks as well as a link to your recent freebie story.

Kim Biel-Nielsen

Hi Tefler - I love the new e-book. Found a minor inconsistency. In chapter 25 location 3871 The dropships have been decoupled from the hull and are parked away from the Invictus. In chapter 26 location 4070 Dana instructs the engineers to remove. the dropships. In chapter 26 Dana elaborates on the removal of the. dropships and the cleanup of dead drakkar. I seen to recall the team wathching the bodies beeing rimoved in chapter 25. You must have fouled you timeline slightly up.

Timbo

Darn. I bought through Amazon.co.uk and thats the only place it will let me review it. I’m very doubtful that the review will copy across to Amazon.com where it would be much more useful. Can someone with an Amazon.com account review it and include clearly labelled links to books 1 & 2? Frustrated Tim

Do it

Ditto

Timbo

I was thinking about writing a review with links in it...

Tefler

Yeah, it's a bit weird, I don't know what ebook 2 isn't showing up in searches. I wonder if it's because of the racier cover? Book 3 has only just come out, so perhaps it'll start being linked to the other two after amazon's search engine sorts itself out?

Timbo

Tef, most of the inter-book links between the three books seem to be missing, certainly on the US Amazon site and I think the others as well. Books 1 & 2 reference each other, and there is even an offer to buy the pair on both their pages. This is unchanged. However book 3 doesn’t reference the earlier books, and vice-versa as well. Furthermore if you search on anything meaningful (like Tefler, for example) you find books 1 &3, but never 2. The only way book 2 can be found is following a link from Book 1’s page. This is all a bit of a shame, as book 3 is flying up the rankings at the moment (no surprise there :-) ) and no doubt will be getting scanned by newbies. It would be a good idea to make it as easy as possible for them to find the other two books in the series, rather than have to go on a hunt. Particularly as there are a lot of good reviews associated with the first two books, as they have had time to gather them. Is this something under your control, or are you ast the mercy of Amazon? Cheers Tim

B S

bought it last night as soon as it went online....Xcellent.....

Dennis Banfield

I still find it incredible how far you have come as an author in such a (relatively) short time. Thank you for writing, I don’t think I’m alone saying that it’s become a part of my life I look forward to for every release!

Tefler

Thanks to everyone who has purchased a copy! I hope it's an improvement over the original versions. :-)

Tefler

Ah, thanks for letting me know!

Evan

Got my copy, too!

Typo Tef, during Drakkar assault on Invictus where Calara empties her gun into the Drakkar in engineering: 'from its grown to its exposed throat' - believe it should be groin...