Battle of Terra - notes
🕑 Added 2018-03-27 22:22:24 +0000 UTC Hey everyone,This is just a quick post for those who have previously expressed an interest in how I write the battle scenes. (And why they take so much more effort!) :-)
I've attached the word document I created especially for chapter 100, which just covers the events in the battle. The list isn't completely exhaustive, because I added a bunch of extra Melkadian scenes based on feedback from editors and patrons.
I just listed all the events I wanted to cover, made a brief note about each one, then juggled the order so that they broke up the battle. That way you get a bunch of mini-cliffhangers as you switch from scene to scene, to hopefully keep the pace of the battle more exciting.
I then crossed out each item as I finished writing the scene.
Anyway, I hope you find it interesting.
Tefler
Comments
Old Cruiser
Still afternoon here in AZ.
Deryck Stevenson
Any idea when three square meals 101 to be published?
Smart wombat
Interesting, and thanks. I wondered if you wrote the separate narrative threads out with rough timelines and then merged them. But it seems you plan that first at the outline stage. Personally I would find that harder, trying to get the ebb and flow of the various views of the battle lined up that early.
Trimtab
Thanks for giving us a peek into your creative process, very interesting, and I'm impressed how you chart a course for the plot and then stick to it methodically.
Jacek Tyburski
Damn, I thought the new chapter would be released the first of the month. Guess I was mistaken, I can't wait for what comes next, it's a long time to wait for such a great story (which I haven't found the equal of anywhere).
Jedi Khan
lol do you really want to put yourself through that torture again?
PLRus--Founding member of the TSM F5 club.
Maybe if we ask him really nicely he would let us read part one...knowing there is going to be the mother of all cliffhangers...You know, last time he did that, Jade died.
PLRus--Founding member of the TSM F5 club.
Well, I would say. But I get jacked up when a do...so my lips are sealed. I would not hold my breath though.
Braw
cheers mr
Tefler
I'm just wrapping up the first half at the moment. I'll hand it over to editors later today, then get stuck into part 2. It took a lot longer than I expected, because there's a bunch more fight scenes.
Jim lynch
Anthony Joshua wins again wilder here he comes ko time
Kim Biel-Nielsen
Hope within a few hours - say T-2
Jim lynch
Any idea when the new chapter is out .
Benj
When they return to Karron to exterminate Kirrix, maybe Alyssa could use her wealth to buy it and improve its child welfare system. Tax the miners to help the kids.
i woud think being captured alive to be birth vessel/food is somthing a predatory warrior race that also eats its prey probably would let happen
Jedi Khan
It's possible that the Drakkar don't have a large enough population to be on the Kirrix's radar, so to speak. Either that or the Drakkar, having been designed for war, are just too hard for the Kirrix to subdue.
PLRus--Founding member of the TSM F5 club.
Yes. He said first week in April.
Tefler, last I heard was 101 was scheduled for 3/31; has there been a change?
Hey Tefler, when are you Letting John face his progenitor guide?
DTC
I just want an update for the status of 101. Anybody?
Tefler
When I originally planned this battle out a year and a half ago, Dana and Sakura were both going to be on the surface. That was before I came up with the Valkyrie (hence no Sakura + the orbital bombardment), A few weeks before I started writing Chapter 100 I came up with Dana dragging the mines, but I was originally going to have her fly through the carrier armada. Firing them off like a shotgun blast I came up with as I was writing it (to avoid them being caught in the blastwave).
Also, a question for Tefler: where's the Dana "mine field sling shot" scene in the doc? Did you just come up with that on the fly? Was Dana originally planned to fight on the surface with everyone else?
PLRus--Founding member of the TSM F5 club.
Chiilled Chilean Monkey Brains
ringill
Very interesting although it seems we still didn't get to find out what a mad scientist has for breakfast, probably something mundane like porridge.
Harald Link
Love the insights!
Tefler, you take the same approach I tell all my students, when writing science reports. Map out the story you want to tell, use headings for sections, then fill in the missing text to link the sections. Simples, no? ;-)
ILRibrarian
Thanks for the share
GrandPaM
phew! even just the outline for that chapter was 3 pages long! That almost seemed more like an IT Project Plan document... heh. Thanks for the insight. It really does help me understand your level of effort to write like you do. I wonder if any of the classic writers of olde did anything similar? Hemmingway seems more like he'd have been a "just wing it"-type of writer, personality-wise. But, what do I know? Thanks again, Tefler!
Tefler
If I think of any dialogue I want to add, then I sometimes sketch that out (as you can see). Sometimes it goes in verbatim, but more often than not I make changes as I go, because when you write the full scene, the flow of the dialogue might go in a slightly different direction. I think when I wrote that particular bit of dialogue, it just sounded better the second way. After all, Ailanthia is definitely not his mother (Jessica Blake is!).
Tefler
I thought of that, but the editors are fans too, so I don't want to spoil it for them. They also don't tend to want me to juggle sequences, more a case of add in more PoV scenes (and inserting new scenes is relatively simple).
Tefler
You're welcome! There's probably better ways of doing it, but I've kind of stumbled onto this method through trial and error and it works for me. I think of it a bit like storyboarding a movie, where they make sketches of all the scenes before they start filming. I remember seeing James Cameron do that on a "making of" for Terminator 2 I think it was. I always thought that was very cool, so I just swiped the technique. Thanks Jim! ;-)
Tefler
No problem, I'm glad you found it interesting!
Kim Biel-Nielsen
Interresting - thanks
bigdawguw65
Tefler...thank you for a little peak into how you weave your magic . I did notice one little difference that caught my eye . In outline you had BSP refer to John as "our whelp" & in the story "the whelp" just wondered if there was any significance to the change (only if it doesn't disclose any spoilers that is ) . Thanks
Kalen Turner
Thank you!
Frostfyre
hmm, one scene missing...
Frostfyre
Thank you for posting that. It actually helped seeing that and got me motivated again, thanks! Just a suggestion, if you do another huge space battle, include the outline when you send to the editors to give them an overview, especially if you split it up.
Just fascinating to see how you approached such an undertaking. To go from that to 28 pages is just incredible. Thank you for the insight, and I hope it gives people a greater appreciation for your craft. Youve really spoiled us with some extra goodies this week! XD
Wow thanks tefler for a wonderful insight into your creative process. As patreons we are blessed to have such access.
Tefler
Yeah I just write each one as I get to them. If you write them in one go, breaking them up into chunks can be a bit tricky. Having said that, I did split a couple of scenes, particularly the reworked dragon fight to add a bit more tension. :-)
Thanks. Was always curious whether you write scenes in order of appearance or whether you write each thread and mix them up after? I guess it’s the former?
Scott
Hahaha great job. That ending was great.
THANKS!! Very interesting.
Thanks for a peek into the process!
morris ridgeway
Thank you.
Evan
Thank you!
Jim lynch
Something to read
Jim lynch
Yay