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Chapter Seventeen: Debrief

🕑 Added 2023-04-07 23:05:00 +0000 UTC

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J S

Ha!

Rosa is probably one of my favorite characters of all time. I love the way her characters talks and interacts with Tom. My only complaint is that their wasn’t more of her in book 1! I’m hoping she’s has as much “page time” as Tom. I wasn’t a huge fan of your interludes in book 1 bc they didn’t have an effect on the current story. I get that they are world building but i felt that you could have accomplished that and influenced our perspective on the main story at the same time by basically introducing characters that are coming up soon(within the book), or to expand current characters or situations through flashbacks.


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