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Xenosexual [Chapter 1 - AKRASIA]

🕑 Added 2024-04-10 12:11:51 +0000 UTC

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Cesar Munguia Aragon

You did great, I loved it, I need more of this

Nyuunzi

That's where the helmet inspiration came from, haha

Lonely Scout

Well damn, I'll have to give it a go! BTW love Strike-2s look, heavily reminds me of Titanfall

Nyuunzi

I think so too, watched a LOT of videos on youtube about character arcs and motivations and... generally how to write characters, took a while to get there, but i'm finally happy with this version

Nyuunzi

Thank you!

Nyuunzi

Just started it, 2 pages in atm, they're on my Discord, like everything else I do! The inner dialogue was based heavily on Disco Elysium, Natyss always was a bit mad, but having multiple voices in her head was an idea that came after playing that, adds to her character... and her madness

Lonely Scout

I like the inner dialog, makes Natyss feel relatable imo. How's the 2nd chapter coming along?

Pally Ganker

This was great

Escafreya

I like this so much more than your original draft. You spent more time developing the character’s personalities, relationships, and the setting of the world. Looking forward to where it goes from here.