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🕑 Added 2021-08-19 13:00:50 +0000 UTC

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EBAWER123

I kinda like this story, more down to earth and less fantasy-like at least for the moment. Those levels and new classes are much more impactful and fun to read about at the start.

M van Dongen

Does she have enough dex to make her strength work ?

Chopper

Evil begets evil- Nuking the goblins will only make them more gobliney.

lmao

a good idea actually

nah this has already happened too many times in this story

MazalTan

Imagine a silent meat grinder, that's a terrifying thought. Especially if it just appeared right beside you out of nowhere

Albedo's Ahoge

This is certainly unique... Though I am not sure how being a quiet berserker works. I always imagined them making noise and not lack thereof. Anyway, looking forward to seeing how this pans out!

SpaceGoddess76

Or have different environments for the tournament. (sort of like Pokémon how there big matches take place in stadiums that can change the landscape.)

SpaceGoddess76

This would be perfect!!

Weldt

I started reading the firefighter story and I gotta say that I like it. It's different and got a bit of the fun I see in AH so please keep em coming. If you make the 2 stories world cross then you could actually combine the 2 heroines into a single story which I don't think is really possible with the chapter difference but could be done in few years :D

Mark

Ilea and Helena would steal it to use as soup broth.

Okay, here's the idea for the tournament. Acid/lava floor. It's stupid as hell, but it really adds tension and interest to organized matches, even if it doesn't hurt the participants. This is also easily feasible, the Pit Dwarves have already used acid against Soul Wardens.

Eyes wide

Am I the only one hoping this is in the same universe as our favourite healer . Like it would be cool if the veil broke when she went to elos and brought magic to earth I know it's probably not but the idea is definitely cool

Camelopardalis

It might also be nice for one of the basilisk chicks to be attracted to the massive output of strange magic, show up to see what's going on, and communicate to Ilea that she remembers her.

Camelopardalis

I'd like to see Owl at her scariest, and then friendly, apologetic and mild-mannered again.

Derrick McDowell

Read it all. Can't wait for the next installments. I like that you are using a bit from your previous system. Do they take place in the same universe?

Tim

Suggestion: Jyraiu should perform! Also: Some threat should attack some human town somewhere(maybe elves, maybe something else) and some of the strong people from the tournaments go to help

Erik R

Tournament suggestion: The one who bests the snot out of the Destroyer, as per promise of a favor, would ask Ilea on a date or something as awkward. The more cringe the better. Claire would ask Cless to paint Ilea and she would get something really embarrassing. Then Violence would steal the painting and blackmail Ilea.

Pierre Steiner

This. If the tournament is a way to show off power, she should have the strongest of her allies do battle against a) strong monsters b) other strong humans (either or) and broadcast it to the audiences. Then, once everyone's strength has been well established (most likely Kyrian being in the top 3?), Illea comes in and wipes the floor with the top 3 or 5. Then a cool speech on Illea not even being remotely close to powerful in the grand scheme of things, that she could absolutely get shredded by things she's seen, let alone the things she doesn't know about. All that to imprint the idea that humans are weak, that they need cooperation and that bickering amongst themselves is ridiculous and potentially a lethal distraction for the whole species.

Flusspferd

As much as I like the POV chapters of characters that appeared along the way, I feel like it would be very much in character for Ilea to be exhausted by the amount of human contact and just fuck off to hit some things. Maybe take some of the high level people to watch her train against a bunch of 4-marks below Karth?

White Neko Knight

Have Ilea act as the ref and healer for the event. Everyone has to fight in her field of ash so she can heal them and prevent collateral damage.

Mark

She's awfully chill for that most of time. Maybe she picked up a serenity stat during her realm travels.

Håkan Friberg

I'm liking the story so far. Think I noticed in some earlier chapters that you used floor when I think you meant ground. Forest floor is OK, but peeing on the floor? Then it's done inside a building on something constructed. And if she's peeing outdoors why mention it's on the ground? Usually it is :) Anyhow, besides me having personal issues with the word "floor", I've really enjoyed it!

Rip Woodham

Ilea meeting more people she inspired or impacted would be nice. Like the imperial scout that watched them take back Morhill I think. Maybe that farmer that gave her a ride and that she rescued from the bandits? Ilea could always be using her clout to give out introductions, to the Empress say, or lending a hand in some visible task. Being visibly useful in some way, or giving demonstrations. Sentinels could give demonstrations of what spars between them are like. Sort of like the showmanship that goes on before a martial arts tournament. Maybe some actual reaction to Dark Ones etc, since I think people were expecting that to be covered. Want to be at the painting auction, definitely. I'm most hoping to see some good action and reactions to the high tier tournament now that Hector is in. Hoping to see Kyrian get pushed into taking part at the end to prevent Hector from winning. Oh, more Kyrian/Aliana? I would've of liked to get some of the Empress group perspective of Meadow, Sentinels etc. Anything more with the Golden Lily, other members, Founders, etc? Ilea could offer to take Evan there and back to meet Empress and see the final fights, etc, though I guess he probably wouldn't be interested. Lily getting offers etc, maybe. Alice? And her getting introduced maybe. Are we ever going to see that girl from House Birmingale she spared again? Or what about the healer girl she traveled with in the first caravan that got a side chapter? Just going down the wiki might give you ideas too.

Nathan C

Verena=Flame Wielder

Thanks for the chapter :) I think a random person's POV witnessing a group of thieves stealing/doing something and reporting this to a sentinel would be enjoyable.

Maybe have a part in one of the chapters depicting all of the Lily gathering and talking about their view of the events? We haven't really seen them all together since the first time.

Mark

For the tournament, we could see the Vultures in a scene with them as the normal folk if they are in the area. Our Lady of Benevolence making an appearance to meet some northern dark ones, maybe with that vampire cursed guy, Kevan I think. (Just as friends, Lady Bene is totally 2nd best girl if Felicia doesn't work out.)

SoggyBiscuit

Damn, she should consider putting a point or two in Dexterity, cus her not being able to dodge better is kinda leaving her pretty fucked after every fight. Also, some more endurance and strength would be pretty good.

Deegles

A demonstration fight with Ilea vs 2-3 other high level people. Maybe at a remote location and with people watching via viewing spells or something.

Nate

Maybe it has to do with what they're doing with the bodies?

Robert Mullins

Tying into what Ricky said, they can do a large scale resistance training event run by Ilea and the sentinels. Pay a certain amount to get in, get paid for providing level- appropriate firepower.

Treim

I can't seem to remember her exactly. Do you know where she was mentioned?

ricky jackson

I think a science show with magic would be cool. maybe a "dance" performance like what you did in ur first tournament. maybe at night time having them cart in monsters for adventurers to fight to give a show to the audience, and then let Owl or some other strong creature make a appearance against Ilea unique magics could be tried on the sentinels or ilea to encourage and inform viewers on different magics, also good way to stegway into Ilea's magic school and her large and dangerous variety of magics u could have ilea set up some of her space gates and they could have the colesiums acts as shopping centers for diffrent regions goods, maybe a night time auction and a lil terrorist plot making nobles questions the efficacy of the portals, even though her space gates and the portals have nothing to do with each other

Noble Defect

You could have a fanatic who worships lilith join the tournament and spread his beliefs.

StarWolf

Thx for the chapter

Ayrawei

Hey Rhaegar, if possible, I want you to revisit that Shadow girl with Astral magic. Rivka was her name. The only Astral mage in the story thats not an extraterrestrial eldritch abomination, I would love to see a backstory and POV of hers. How did she acquire powerful magic that only Lovecraftian horrors use? She was very interesting and I would love to see her growth after all this time, especially since fighting Ilea seemed to wake her up a little.

Straven

Thanks for the chapter and the update, take care.

Simon Casey

It may be a bit cliche, but regarding the tournament I would like to see the winner ask for a bout with Ilea as part of the prize, so we can see Ilea show off how far she has come. If that doesn’t work out I totally get it, but some of my favorite scenes are when people get their expectations and worldview shattered like glass.

RepossessedSoul

Also, I typed this on my phone so I apologize for the shit paragraphing and it being one large text block.

RepossessedSoul

You are going to run into the same problem of no real tension in this novel as you've run into with Ilea. The MC is effectively immortal with her health regain from slaying enemies. Even if you show her taking a Chapter to recover she still does so with no real side effects. I think you need to take a second and figure out what the tension points are going to be if the MC has none. Will it be a focus on how they need food and in today's society most food is produced in megafarms or on large monocrop corporate farms? Is the tension going to come from a race against the clock to find a cure for someone's diabetes, as insulin is now a thing of the past? There are ways to add tension and work around the immortal MC but so far the tension that would normally hold my attention isn't there. You have a good universe setup but I think the cost of her fighting needs to be higher and there needs to be some actual effects from her getting knocked around like a piñata. Otherwise this story will just turn into Ilea 2.0 with the MC being virtually untouchable unless a deity decides to intervene, or something of such power it could be treated as a deity.

Ollie

Ideas for the tournament: (minor) winner of tournament also gets one of their battles painted by Cless and gifted. Twin, Baron and Ruler meet. Potentially together with Meadow and Ilea. Also think Twin would love Cless’ magic. Maureen showing up by noticing the winds of change and some plot development there? Elana/Maro meet and POV. Possibly with featuring Scipio(at meadow?) Ilea and Lily with a “normal” day/night at the sentinels. Give Lily insight to their training and what it entails.

Eyes wide

Thanks for the chapter

Alexander Dupree

Love it thanks for the chapter

Melting Sky

The real question here is what the Hell was out there that prompted a tactical nuclear strike?! Seriously, if they dropped a nuke it means nothing else they had worked. There are far worse things stalking the night than ogres and orcs.

MacDB

Sound magic berserker, very cool

BurnNote

It is certainly a name

G. Harthane

Infrasound Berserker

G. Harthane

Now I can also reveal the name of the novel :).


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