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Chapter 471 Shadows

🕑 Added 2020-04-28 16:06:37 +0000 UTC

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Master of Bunnies

“Why would I be sacred?!” the boy asked. That should be "scared", not "sacred".

Ghornet

Alaina sounds like sweet summer child. It's fun teaching children how to use a sword.

fbt

yes, this was soo much more polished and clear, which really lets the story shine..and it was just a nice bit, too. Great work!

PloofDoodle

Yeah, but on the one hand parents can be like that when it comes to their kids.

Michael Mock

I don't like how Dale reacted to IIea when she was playing with his kids. How he thought that she would seriously hurt his kids seemed uncalled for. I can understand from his standpoint that in his world people with great power abuse that power but, I thought that the reason he invited IIea over to his home was that he trusts her. For him to feel threatened about the safety of his kids around IIea at home seems rude.

Samuel Johansson

Thanks for the chapter! They're the highlights of my week =)

foldedcorners

I've been following essence of ash during the write-a-thon, funny that you mention it :)

Joshua Little

Thanks for the chapter.

Bob Xander

There are likely privacy/defensive enchantments on the outside of the house (which don't extend inside). That's how I'm justifying it at least.

Kevin Dyer

I know the timing of "open door, see pretty wife" makes sense normally, but wouldn't Abby have already been in Ilea's sphere when she knocked?

Seb

Nope Nope Nope, I really don't see Ilea doing any resistance training with Dale's kids. I think it would strain their relationship at the very least and I dont want that

Dominic French

I wonder if llea will ever have kids, I mean she has at least a few hundred years to live, although I hope she gets the power to take on the ascended before even thinking about such things right now she can survive and run but I could see shit going south for everyone around her if something like that attacks.

Some Total Kretin

My first impression was smallish frame and sexy in the redheaded Irish way, not young. So the Loli tag seems more like a projection of your own desires/expectations. ◉‿◉

MountainFox

There is an irony when the policeman marries a loli. They either married really young to have a son that old or she's really looking good for her age!

"The woman chocked and tried" into "The woman choked and tried." Thanks for the chapter!

Kristoffer

Love it! It's nice to see her interacting with normal people

Nate

I'd like to add my voice to the everyone saying Ilea should invite Dale's kids into her healing order. Maybe not until she actually starts creating classes, but it'd be nice to see her using her resources to help her friends.

Connor Bruha

Thanks for the chapter.

Nate

Ooh, I second that. :D

Nate

Redhead. :P

SoggyBiscuit

Well, Rhett may not be Ilea's type, but it'd be neat if she offered him a spot in her organisation, because he checks a lot of boxes. He isn't too young for resistance training, he seems to feel gratitude to Ilea (even though she doesn't care), his level is reasonably low to train for his first evolutions and he probably doesn't have a second class. Though, Ilea'll have a hard time convincing Dale, seeing as he's really seems to love his family, and when he learns of that the training at the Sentinels is basically torture with willing subjects...

ShadeByTheSea

Ilea can do a lot of things, but I don't think she could torture her friend's son. At least not without Dale's express permission and request.

PloofDoodle

If the chapter was twice as long I would have loved for a pov change to the kids while they trained with Illea

Her order is a secret until the first lot is strong enough and ready I believe. Some know she have an order of healers but not where it's at specifically nor the magnitude of said order. Some belive that she is part of an order of healers thanks to her Healer tag and high level.

Jack Stiles

This was really nice. But what race is the wife. Very mysterious.

Sebastian Prue

I love these chapters, my only issue is how fast I seem to read them!

sharkattack

When you were learning the times tables, I studied the blade

Rip Woodham

<3 <3 Some of my favorite interactions in the story here! Please more with Dale's family. The Shadows were settled nicely too, and thanks for letting us know about the Varren/Viper issue. Last chapter was bugging me, but this chapter washed that away. I enjoyed it so much.

Itsurmom

A bit of a weird read this one, but enjoyable I guess.

Chopper

Imagine trying to teach a little girl swordplay in today's world. If someone found out the parents would be locked up! God forbid a child learn how to defend themselves or experience a little adversity.

Chad Hagner

Thank you for the chapter! I like that Dale's family is treating Ilea like just a good friend. What if Ilea helps Dale's son become a warrior/heals?! Interesting future story arc.

Alexander Dupree

I love that she was knocked speechless by simply seeing her.

Straven

Adorable kids. Thank you for the chapter.

Some Total Kretin

It's imho partially caused by the antagonistic way they were presented. Also not being fleshed out so much. As I wrote in my own comment - generic grim growly men growling grimly while our usual characters are much more interesting. The shadows were like paper cutouts in everything. I should apologize to the guy/girl that was angry at the last chapter for being filler. While I still not think of the chapter as complete filler I find the previous chapter decidedly not up to standard with the benefit of hindsight.

Bobtur

Thanks for the chapter. Of course Ilea tried to hit on the mother.

Drumic

I feel like the double take line needs to come after the "magic eminating from him" line. Does not seem to flow right as it is written atm.

May Raven

Rhett: “You’re barely older than me!” Rhetts mom: “Oh y e a h she is ;)” *Hello I’m Chris Hanson*

Alexander Dupree

Thanks for the chapter. I am glad we switched to less strained social interactions. The shadows just felt weird to me for some reason.

Chase Clawson

Aww, I love Dale and his family :) seems like a great bunch! I look forward to seeing more of them!

Some Total Kretin

Oh yes. Much better. First impression is less rushed then the previous chapter and the characters are more interesting then the generic grim growly men growling grimly at each other in grey surroundings of a field. Gracious.

Emma Carlin

Ilea should offer to take them into her order once they're old enough. Maybe don't tell Dale about the torture though...

Error25

Nice to meet Dales family finally! While i like Dale, he's now my least favorite member of his family... lol.


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