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Chapter 342 Are you not entertained?

🕑 Added 2019-10-31 16:10:42 +0000 UTC

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Rip Woodham

Reading through this again, I just want to say I loved the bit with the guard. :-) Looking forward to where that goes, hahaha.

Joshua Little

Thanks for the chapter. Ilea is going to get a General Skill for animal taming if she keeps this up.

Alexander Dupree

I agree Popi seemed super weird. I liked the Maro Ilea conversations though. I just realized I envisioned Popi just sitting on a stool in a hot kitchen for the entire conversation.

Thaabit Rivertree

I don't get it. Popi sounds like a 5 year old child who keeps repeating the same thing. Last time we saw him he was a normal adult, without any obvious mental issues. Author, I love your fiction, and it stands heads and tails above about 95% of the fiction out there. But it seems lately like the quality sort of went down because you were trying something new with the dialogue and dynamic between Ilea and Maro. Like you were trying for funny or flirting but it just didn’t get across. I would recommend taking some time to work on dialogue and writing humor (as in find an experienced author or workshop to go to) if that’s a direction you want to go in or a tool you want to use sometimes. One of the main issues is that there is very little scene description during dialogue, particularly of body language. Popi gets a bunch of lines but there’s no indication of what his body is doing, gestures, facial expressions, posture, eyes. Ilea we know well enough that it doesn’t matter as much, but sometimes I feel like I’m reading about two disembodied voices talking to each other. Popi also repeats the same thing almost word for word several times and it just comes across as fake and not nuanced enough for a level 200 + warrior. Maybe if you worked a bit more on giving each side character a brief but unique background, one that maybe only you as author know, but nonetheless would give a bit of depth to their personalities. Or maybe you could base characters more often on real life people you know to get inspiration for real personalities and quirks. These are just suggestions though, I’m no author, just trying to offer some helpful ideas. To me, Popi comes off this time as either an adult with a 5 year old mind or an overly smiling, unhinged and disconcerting guy.

Songy

Yeah, had the same thought. but it fits Ilea that she didnt even look at it before. mMybe add "Oh, that’s the message from [the idiot] before." to the next sentence.

levon

Want the bone armor with the enchanter?

Cadastral

‘ding’ ‘You have defeated [Son of the White Flame – lvl 118 / Arcane Enhancer – lvl 103] Oh, that’s the message from before. She hadn’t even looked at it. My first thought was "Wait, was the bird a shape-changed assassin?

tibbish

Its not hypocrisy. Not even close!! War between large armies with cities at stake and subject to widespread rape, murder, and looting of non-combatants in the event of a loss is verrrrrrrry different than a duel between individuals who are the only ones directly involved or effected by the outcome of said duel. I'd also point out that even if you want to ignore the ethics and morals surrounding the events that led to the duel he immediately went for a kill shot against her once it started. Its just that Ilea was so much stronger than him she could tank all his kill shots easily. If he had instead been more mild in his attacks, or even just his pre-fight actions, instead of trying to kill I bet she wouldn't of killed him at all. Ilea is practical but not vindictive. Even when she killed him she did it in a way that while messy was painless and quick unlike his attacks. And as she said if she hadn't of killed him he wasn't going to stop trying to attack her in one way or another. Dude was a huge prick with a vandetta.

Thorlol

Wasnt it the first time that Iliea killed someone because he just annoyed her? There is some hypocrisy if she does that but forbids wars against other sentients. Not that I care too much because that guy reaped what he sow but it gets you thinking.

Zachary Smith

Kittie!

Michael C

Great chapters

Emma Carlin

They're so far behind her in power, dealing with them would be more of a comedy chapter. Although I think meeting with Alice(?) and training her to get the Azarinth-healer class would be interesting. She already survived the moss and could be useful in creating the new healing order.

Quant

Moar kitties.

Todd Kloos

Now that there is a bard singing songs about an ashen healer called Lilith, the Forkspear family will definitely hear about it and send more adventurers to cause trouble. Ilea should probably go deal with them now instead of waiting and dragging this out while the Forkspears harass her friends.

Chopper

Great chapter! I hope the mother swordmouth tiger is ok as well!

Chopper

She promised the fox and the blacksmith cakes! Didn't the fox say 'dont come back without more cake'? heh... Ilea is gonna be in trouble.

Findell

She didn't place any orders for popi's stuff?

Kris

Awesome chapters. Thanks again 😁

Yaksher

I think it became clear enough at Ilea's arrival

Grond (James)

It was really unclear that Jacquen was a guard until after the fight. But good chapter overall

agentjongon

Yeah that's what I thought as well. But it would be cooler if the bards song stated that she had bone armour.

whatbm

I thought she left the bone armor to be enchanted??? "more fierce than the bone armor clad healer" "ask if I may retell what I saw… your bone armor… the ash"

Solarlancer

For some reason these 2 chapters felt really satisfying and beautiful

Anghwrtais

Thank you.

Arnon Parenti

Acid baths and tiger dens dont mix too well

Arkeus

‘ding’ ‘You have defeated [Son of the White Flame – lvl 118 / Arcane Enhancer – lvl 103] Pretty cool sounding main class, though the second class seems pretty meh there. Still, Ash Wielder was not 'At 100', so he would have had time to evolve it before 200.

Tony Gilbert King

I echo Eofad I am very much entertained.

Eofad

I am very much entertained!


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