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Pre sketch | Dragon Lessons III Page 18
🕑 Added 2021-04-07 10:10:00 +0000 UTCThis is the part of the comic where I'm in charge of the script, feel free to suggest corrections to make my dialogues fit better to the characters or if you see a typo or grammar error xD
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Blitzdrachin
Its a pre sketch
Kyrasq
Pros images are comming out really quick Cons some parts of it you can't tell some times what it is Fix no matter how long it takes we will be patiently waiting for your page that cools cooler then scribbles
Bloudin Ruo
I've got two grammatical/word order suggestions, if I can be so forward: 1) Nerk's first speech bubble: "Well, we Aussies never quit. Teach me everything, fellas." Just swapping a comma for a period after 'quit' and adding a comma before 'fellas'. 2) Nerk's shouting speech bubble: "Hey! You can't just leave me like this!" Contracted 'cannot' and just re-ordered the wording to make it read smoother, more like how you'd say it in a conversation. Everything else looks great!
