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Behind When Villain Win 02
🕑 Added 2015-09-24 13:05:55 +0000 UTC "You will be mine.." - ApplejackWarning : Our Applejack is too honest.
Warning : This comic is secret of When Villain Win where it's was continue from this scene => http://vavacung.deviantart.com/ar..
Beware broken English. This comic have no proofreader since my current proofreader not comfortable to work for NSWF stuff. But if you be kind and help me fix it by comment to this post. I will be gladly to fix it.
I will update this comic 2-3 page per week. Since I want to balance my time for life and another comic too. Hope you understand...
Comments
Vavacung
"Sex" is too bluntly.
Kankri Vantas
The panel with her saying "Get laid with me" That's simple, all I have to do is make you have sex with me
Kankri Vantas
Aj looks like lj
Nocara
Hmm about the ; I think that is a personal preference. The last sentence, I think it change the intention behind it... but of course without more feedback of the author I dont know ^^; So those fixes are valid :)
Enigma Mystere
"Then you leave me no choice but to make you mine; to give you a reason to stay with me." "It's simple." "I'll just have you get me laid." ...I think those are better fixes. ^^;
Nocara
Nice :) Let me help you: Then, you leave me no choice but to make you mine, to give you a reason for stay with me. What are you trying to do!?! I will just make you to get laid with me.
Enigma Mystere
"Than" should be "Then", with no comma after, "What are you trying to do", and, while it seems off, I'm not quite sure what you're going for with "I will just make you get laid with me". ^^; Sorry I couldn't help more.
