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Crazy Alternate Future Part 01-02

🕑 Added 2015-06-15 10:38:26 +0000 UTC

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Raile21

No worries, something to consider for future work. But the quick fix you have done on the hoof made it better to be viewed at a glance. The eyes issue most people won't really notice unless they really squint and focus.

Vavacung

Sorry. I can't changed much without destroy the whole picture. But the end of her right front hoof really touch her new appeared at the moment. Since previous panel she move her hooves to touch it..////.

Raile21

Another is probably the object order in the right panel. If the angle of the pose is seen as if we're at ground level. Then the... Stallionhood should be in front of her raised hoof which means only part of her raised hoof should be visible. This means that the object closer to us should hide / obscure the object behind it. Her raised hoof should also look more distinctive, as it is it looks more like a snowball floating near her Stallionhood. I feel oddly ridiculous writing constructive criticism like this, but hey it makes more sense that the plot line of the movie Jupiter ascending when I watched it in the cinema.

Raile21

Oh I noticed there is some revision needed on the left panel eyebrow and the right panel eyes. By right it shouldn't show on the goggles as well, unless you're suggesting the goggles are transparent.