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Hot Tub Love Machine - 15
🕑 Added 2021-03-29 20:01:00 +0000 UTCHi, one more already paid update in March, it's been a busy month! Hope everyone's doing well. If you are not up to date on Hot Tub Love Machine, read the previous chapters here:
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Neal Johnstone
She may not be there, but she's not forgotten! Glad you had fun!
Neal Johnstone
Glad I have pressure on both sides of the "moral" MCs amongst my readers. I'm looking forward to hurrying him toward that poon myself.
HardhatDoozer
Lucas here is the only one who isn’t “in”. Well he is just delaying the inevitable. Still fun chapter. Four naked girls and a single bed. Oh boy. Now that’s a physics problem if I ever heard one. But Ray is missing. At least I miss her.
Nick Cartwright
I’m not as into the more “moral” MC’s as the other guy. DPP and Price were my favorites because the main character leaned into it. Except for Ray in price (he really pussyfooted around that one). Ring toss is balanced between this series MC and the others. This character is taking way too long to get to the point. At least it finally seems like he’s going to be getting some poon soon.
Neal Johnstone
Thanks, I'll get the edits done early tomorrow, Kinda locked up with family stuff for the evening.
Nice chapter. Like I've said before, I prefer your slightly more morally sound protagonists, like in Ring Toss or Space Nut, to the more corrupt ones in DPP and Price, so I enjoyed that aspect of the chapter. On top of that, I only have a couple corrections. "If Dawn had jumped to..." Wrong toi'ere. "Emi and Ray stepped in through the threshold... Emi was sliding the spare house key back into the magnetic key holder. She passed it to Anna who stuck it to the underside of the mailbox." Ray turns into Anna here, but it's clearly supposed to be just Anna and Emi.
