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Every Woman Has a Price - 22 - Cut Off
🕑 Added 2020-05-26 21:40:56 +0000 UTCHi! Hope everyone is safe and well! I had to make a change to 21 because I didn't like where it forced 22 to go. I changed the final lines, preventing Elizabeth from getting in the truck with Brett and I left the coins with her.
Originally I had planned to bring the cops who had interviewed Owen in hospital. I ditched that idea, too many characters as is, and to make it work Elizabeth couldn't have gone with. I hope you guys like how it turned out!
If you are not up to date on Every Woman has a Price, check out the previous chapters here:
https://drive.google.com/open?id=1r9Ugk3EYFL1TurzgulHsycd7PqldTYOx
Still very much on point for Small Town Goddesses on Sunday. I'm not 100% on my superhero story for Saturday.
Thank you all for the support!
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Neal Johnstone
Thanks! I need to know when something's not working or is unclear. I'll comment here, but I'll make sure the data gets into the story. She KNOWS the coins are an obsession of her father. She believes her freedom from her overbearing father can be achieved if she makes a deal with the coins themselves. So if she buys them from Owen, she's the one in power.
Iam confused: What is Natashas plan at this stage? I mean she DOES know about the coins and yet she kidnapps their owner...
