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New Story Teaser: Chapters 2 & 3 + Some Q&A

🕑 Added 2025-12-02 00:00:54 +0000 UTC

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Not Evil Lemon

The scene I envisioned would require the students to use only magic. So I'll just adjust Lucian's announcement to something like this: Then, with a smile, he looked up at the students. “If you want a spot in this class, just move me out of the circle. But you're only allowed to try and do so using magic, don’t bother trying to push me with your bare hands. If that’s too much trouble, you can leave. Class assignments aren’t final until the end of the month, so there’s no penalty for walking out now.” As for the power scaling issue, could you please clarify what potential issues do you see exactly? This is planned to be an OP MC story from the start, so Lucian being strong isn't a big deal in my mind.

Sparifankerl

I've enjoyed those chapters so far and am looking forward to reading more. As others have identified before, there's a potential power scaling issue around the way you introduce Lucian. And I'm wondering why no-one from the course tried to simply carry the professor outside the ring. If it's an anti-magic barrier, physical attempts to move him should be perfectly possible. Are all those students too focused on magic or is there some other reason why none tried?

Not Evil Lemon

Thanks for taking the time to read! Can you explain why the Belkov thing is annoying to you exactly?

Touch

I love the story’s overall concept, but the rumor and her insistence on Belkov bloodline is annoying and tbh, don’t wanna see in future chapters

Not Evil Lemon

The idea of splitting up the first chapter is interesting, but I'll have to really think about it. Because I don't want it to take too long for the story to get to the main plot. That being said, some extra detail probably is a good idea. Glad you like the concept though. And thanks for the feedback!

Ekuet

I feel like these chapters were better than the first. The first one seemed... fast? While these chapters had more detail. I almost want to say to split the first chapter into two, and fill them out with detail. The first half describing more of Lucian's deeds and maybe a fight with the Vampire lord to earn his decades long sleep only to be brutally splashed with water. Then the second half going into more detail about the visions, or the actual campus (architecture, maybe other faculty, when was it built, etc.). Overall, I like the concept and am excited to see more chapters.


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