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39: Black and White

🕑 Added 2025-08-28 15:22:00 +0000 UTC

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Mizar Caph

Hmm

Biotricsx

No way does Chloe get a pet in the future

Mizar Caph

Hmm yeah. I've edited the excerpt about Ynett's evolutions, so it should be clearer she's on her third one now, looking to get her fourth. And I've also edited out the other errors as well. Thanks!

Peter Adams

“N-no… you don’t understand. I can be more useful to you "alive than" if you eat me.” alive than* double spacing. “How? What, you gonna sprout a second brain for me later?” "How? You gonna sprout a second brain for me later?"* More fluent like this. "She was already on her third evolution, but her level still sat stubbornly at five. To get to the next one, she needed twenty. Ynett had pieced that much together after noticing the pattern. Each evolution so far had cost double the last. First one at level five, second at ten, and now… well, twenty." I m confused doesn't this mean she is actually on her SECOND evolution? Sure she is on her a third form, but sounds like she only evolved twice... "Ynett opened her mouth to give the order, then stopped. Something tugged at her mind, sharp and "sudden. One" of her servants was gone." sudden. One* double spacing.

Mizar Caph

Thanks for the comment, should be fixed now!

Napalm078

'Then just as quickly as they appeared, the chains shattered.' Bind human really has the worst track record; we've never seen it work on screen. "A single flex of muscle, and they blew apart into black shards. ." *into black shards. 'Wood shattered into splinters as she tore through one room, then another, before finally cratering into the far hall.' OOF for the wolf girl. "Something was off, Chloe didn't get any notifications.Which meant the wolf girl wasn’t dead yet." *get any notifications. Which meant the 'Where… where am I?' DOUBLE OOF! 'Maybe later. Yeah, maybe later.' >:) "She looks human, mostly. But her face, her hands… they have scales. Like… like a snake’s scales.”" *"She looks human, -it's missing the first quotation mark 'W-well… I'm actually a Champion too.' :o 'Ynett knew the numbers better than anyone.' Ynett pov? Nice! 'A monstrous lizard wreathed in ice, its breath could turn prey into lifeless statues in an instant.' Uhh. Lifeless statues. That'll... help. Yeah. For sure. Thank you for the chapter :D

Mizar Caph

Chloe Vs Ynett will be a fight to see!

matt

Phht, she's gonna rip straight through that power leveler.


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