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The Big Oof! Volume 1 Chapter 27: Finding The Source

🕑 Added 2023-02-09 08:09:44 +0000 UTC

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scribbles

made the edits, thanks!

David Ellis

"was clear that he was not physically a physical man by any means," this is technically grammatically correct, but repetitive. It might read better like this: "was clear that he was not a physical man by any means,"

David Ellis

"Sucking in a lung full of air", "Sucking in a deep breath" these two paragraphs are very similar. I think an earlier draft was accidentally included?


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