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[TWS] Chapter 229 – End of the World [HIDDEN]
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IncinX
I just subscribed because I'm a big fan of your recent additions to Amazon. While the story and characters are great, the grammar and sentence structure has always needed a bit of work. A prime example is in this chapter: "might or might not consider not". Out-of-context, it sounds ridiculous, and in-context it needs some work. You had some of these problems in the Amazon published works and they have always bothered me. It seems to happen when you combine a double negative with something else, so my general advice would be to watch the double negatives, and when they do occur, read the full sentence and paragraph over a few times. You do it rarely and I thoroughly enjoy your work despite them. For this specific example: "Both of them had a past they might or might not consider not what they would like it to have been". It could better be rephrased to "Both of them had a troubled past that they wish could have been better".
Colin Dearing
I want the baby of a GOD! OK, I can see where you are coming from there :)
MadRat
Thx for the chapter. 👍👏👏
Dan Garff
Just a small request, strictly for scientific purposes.
Jon Torres
Well, This will make Kendra happy.
Kconraw
Thx for the chapter
Darth Mole
Oh wow. I know just how Ast must feel. Random hotties wanting to kiss and then jump his bones right after -ahem- >.>
Mark Ryane
Well, at least the cliff is funny.
John Duncan
Awe man is it Tuesday tomorrow? Yeah it is hee hee hee
NopiSoul
And now there must be an yell from at least 2 of his girls of the Kind: "You can't, I want Masters child first." And one of them should be Bryn.
