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[BIAW] Chapter 84 – The Duels ❤

🕑 Added 2021-08-01 23:02:19 +0000 UTC

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Rizeres

I CHALLANGE YOU TO A CUM DUEL!

Kconraw

awesome chapter! Thx

The first part of the chapter was like: You better all lie down, because I'm about to turn left and I don't wan't to smack you with my dick :D

Saileri

Also, I noticed that I missed your previous comment above the one I answered. We don't really know in how much danger Astrea actually was until we get to the next chapter and the whole summary, also perhaps explanation of what actually happened. I didn't really think about it that way since when I write I just get my mind into the character and go with what they would have done in the current situation. I can say that Astrea wasn't in a life-death situation back there. But well, I'm sorry if I kind of ruined her moment in your eyes. Honestly, the first draft was for her to not even take part in the fight and Al challenging the alpha directly, but I felt like that would have been just kinda boring with such a fun character as Astrea around. So, I guess the middle part changed, but the finale remained pretty close to original. Anyhow, there's a lot that's going to happen and a lot of talks after this part, which I'm currently writing right now.

Saileri

Simple. He saw the mana-metal getting cracked. What if the chains couldn't completely stop Micah. He is using Shino's ability only because he still has it on him and the borrow skill is on cooldown. He knows how powerful her Moon Slashing Arts are from both using it himself during the duel with Kamil or some practice later, and from her stories about their adventures. He didn't think about which technique from that skill branch to take during the incident, he just innately wished for the strongest possible, which overlapped with the fact that it was one he hasn't used before. And it did pack quite a punch. His whole Class is about supporting others and, as we have learned after a few Tiers, using their strengths for himself too. There are a few techniques from his Formless Blade Arts that we haven't yet seen, but considering the situation, it the choices he made should be quite understandable, considering Al. I always try to make the fights as much different from the previous ones to avoid the feeling of reusing moves and that's also why we have seen mostly new moves from both him or Astrea while just slightly reusing older ones, like the swords. But, I can't really avoid making everyone not feel like things are lazy, unfortunately. This one could have certainly gone in tens of different ways, and I have countless different designs for the whole chapter, including the finishing, but in the end, I will always have to choose one path that to me sounds nice. All of them are great. It's often hard to choose. But, I can't spend hours deciding on which to write. So, I apologize if things appear lazy or any other way, but it is what it is. There are some small changes, like that "fainting" part, since nothing is perfect, but I usually have to stick to a plan I made up in my mind.

The Tallest Tree

Good that you also felt the fainting was bleh. It just make Al seem weak. Also if its such a big and important fight that he has to swap Astrea...Why is he using Shinos ability that he has virtually zero real fighting experience with? Comes across as lazy. Lazy in a supposedly ultra dangerous moment that was so bad he had to swoop in and save Astrea....He could have used his chains and killed the wolf 20 different ways that fit him more.

The Tallest Tree

Fair. But it just doesn't flow well in my mind. The wolf guy is basically dead and blasted 50 meters away. The fact that he is suddenly there in front of Astrea with enough strength to cause Al to swap is strange and hard to digest. Its magic sure but still. Felt really unnecessary for the development of her character and the story overall with her needing Al to save her for her big fight against her abuser. Again that's not a problem in and of itself but the build up and execution is just bumpy. The great thing about BIAW imo is that the female characters are strong. Not just in martial strength or magic but in their ability to strategies, learn, love, and grow. Astreas arc felt like Al comes in and cleans up the problems with her people and they worship him for it rather than Astrea felling her abuser with her own strength, cunning, and resolve.

shifter1987

Very good you have chosen death lil doggie muahahahah

Saileri

Just slightly dizzy from the first use of the skill and pushing his body to the limits in a moment. It won't affect him much in the beginning of the next chapter. He just has to catch a breath :v I didn't really intend to make him faint, and the previous version ended on "ready to embrace the ground" where Astrea would catch him and we would get into dialogue, but I decided to change it since people could have misinterpreted that ending.

ThisClown

Perfect explanation. Also glad you mentioned that you changed it, as I only read the email. Better ending with him just being super tired.

Saileri

If you were jumping in to protect someone at the last moment from the opponent that you personally haven't clashed against, you would not do anything else than go all out, not matter how strong they are. And through the description, the difference in power was shown, pretty much showing that this much wouldn't be necessary for a normal fight. And let's just not forget that Al's Class is mostly supportive. Yes, he has insane stats compared to some others people, but these influence skills mostly as it was explained at the beginning of the story. He isn't that experienced with Shino's skills either. It was a split-second decision. Last thing he saw was Astrea being almost completely drained and on the floor moments before her ear twitched (which through the whole chapter hinted at her Sixth Sense). It's obvious that with his personality he would not wait to see what happens next. He is not stupid. If someone survived that blow, for whatever reason, the counterattack would surely not be something puny. And as for fainting. If you read the story from the email, then I apologize since that part has been changed around 3 minutes after posting as I also felt it didn't fit.

The Tallest Tree

Mate. For some random 'enraged' Tier 4 Wolf he has to go 'all out'? Astrea was more than capable enough. Its silly that you felt she needed his help to do this. She really didn't. Also lol? He faints? He's a bloody Primordial. Sure there might be some fuckery going on with his red symbols but seriously...

ThisClown

God damn that was good. I imagine he tried to cheat and Al will have no repercussions. I’m very keen for the following chapter especially more about the 5 beast women who made the alpha jealous. Good work as always

Ralph

Awesome fight! I loved it.

Saileri

Thanks :)

Eroyla Drago

This chapter was awesome!


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