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Chapter 51

🕑 Added 2024-06-25 05:00:41 +0000 UTC

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Wasted Ink

Oh God, that IS painful. I have a lot of things happening in my life at the moment, so it is VERY possible that I was distracted while writing that paragraph. Thank you for the correction!

OdinMage

As always, I love your work. This story is amazing and I eagerly await more. That said, this sentence is painful: "Intelligent and ambition to an extremely high degree, with a very fortune power that seemed tailor-made to lead him into a position of prestige and power." It should be either 'Intelligence and ambition' or 'Intelligent and ambitious'. 'fortune' should be 'fortunate' (at least that's what I assume you're going for). And the duplicate use of 'power' sounds odd, so I'd go with 'fortunate ability...' Given how well you normally write, and that I've never seen anything else anywhere in the story that made me want to comment on it, I'm assuming something was going on to distract you right at that moment. Anyway, keep writing!

Itisn1tmyname

concerning the "he started breaking all known Manton Laws and Limits" - iirc, that's not how it works? I think the limit was "most powers can either directly affect organic material, including other humans (e.g Panacea), or they can affect inorganic material and humans can only indirectly be affected (e.g Kaiser, Vista). There are known exeptions. (E.g Clockblocker). A first-trigger parahuman is (as far as known) always protected from directly harming themselves with their own power (E.g. Spitfire doesnt burn herself, etc) - indirect harm is possible (E.g if Oni Lee teleports straight up, he *will* fall and it *will* hurt)" Since he is demonstrating multiple powers, I would argue he doesn't actually violate these... guidelines.


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