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[Archived Story #2] DC: NTR System

🕑 Added 2025-01-24 00:24:31 +0000 UTC

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Your Mom

yeah man, that was my whole problem with Seth cause he doesn't change unless in that moment when he needs to gain power. He's just a guy who constantly puts on different maks for different scenario's. Also Seth was written to acutally think everything through and it's acutally agnozing writing about a smart character since they wouldn't slip up but I'm not some genisu which makes it hard. For Ricky, it's easy cause I can forget something then later claim it was because of his stupidity LOL.

BLazeSavage

It's an amazing story, though I understand how writing about such an MC can be difficult plus the 4th wall breaks. You can't exactly make him have feelings for others and have to make reasons for him to keep them around. Ricky seems like sunshine compared to Seth IMO XD. Plus you did an amazing job developing Ricky (making him driven, ambitious, caring). Don't know how you would go about developing Seth if you decide to pick this story up later though. I think this would go something like Reverend Insanity with the mc willing to do anything for power.