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The Fusionist Book 3 -- Chapter 16

🕑 Added 2023-09-01 19:15:46 +0000 UTC

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Jonathan Brooks

You're right -- I should probably take that out

Caleb Reusser

I'm not sure I feel about the description of long-lost. Larek has only know that his dad wasn't his father for a few months to a year. Describing his sperm donor as long-lost (to me) implies that Larek was aware his sperm donor was out there and had been looking for him for years.

Jonathan Brooks

:) I'll see what I can do!

Keenan Mallard

Jon. I thought Zogarth was bad about cliffhangers. Same with the mark of the fool author. Yet, you've managed to have numerous cliffhangers in such a short period of time. good gods, man....KEEP IT UP! (seriously, really liking the pacing)


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