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The Fusionist Book 2 -- Chapter 53

🕑 Added 2023-06-12 17:05:38 +0000 UTC

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Jonathan Brooks

I will certainly look about changing this so it makes more sense; when I first wrote it, I did have trouble coming up with a reasonable explanation of why he should participate. I think when you read the rest of the story, you'll see that it makes a little more sense, but I can see about ensuring that, at this point in the story, the reasoning is more in line with expectations

Infinite42

I'm not buying that anyone would want a first year to participate in these games and draw attention to him. He's half great one and I just don't think the reasons given by shinpai are reasonable within the context of how he and the dean have acted before. It feels very manufactured, imo. He needs to do it because ppl heard about him being offered?? Like, what??

Jonathan Brooks

I can definitely review all of this to have it make more sense when I do my editing!

LitLeveler

I have to agree, this seems ridiculously forced. He's a first year that cannot cast spells, I repeat cannot cast. I doubt many nobles would care even if he knows fusions. Most think of them as simple a means to and end and not powerful. Next, since they know what he is, why not let him watch a healing class, learn spells, and recreate the fusion in a different way. He is being plot forced into a plot trap while knowing the "plot"... I had to make that pun. Anyway, this will go poorly, a friend will be injured, he'll save them, and boom more people find out and ends on a giant cliff of what will happen now that they all know. I know it's finish but please consider the above points because this force with ALL the ways to avoid it is really hurting the story. I can accept his stupidity but not the Dean and Grandmaster's.


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