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PU Book 2 - Chapter 42: Exhibition Match

🕑 Added 2024-03-28 14:22:27 +0000 UTC

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Patrick Laplante

It's totally fine. Just a fair warning, though, I don't usually change things because they'll get spotted by my editor. That being said, I occasionally spot some things from this kind of comment that I feel warrants directly changing because it might cause too much confusion.

Max McLean

Heya. Fresh Patreon supporter. Couple things I noticed, am unsure if you usually like to take feedback but figure the worst is that I'll get hit by a moderator! "It's good to see that everyone showed up," said Haley as she walked in. "I was worried some of you might interpret my invitation as a request and not show up." Need to remove one of the 'show up' comments for flow. Either finish this as "... as a request." or re-write the first comment to "It's good to see everyone" or similar. Daphne, were you and Astley fighting against [->again]?

Robert Gardner

TFTC


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