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Brooke Goes To College, part 3, page 37

🕑 Added 2022-09-06 23:26:31 +0000 UTC

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Aaron Chandler

It's almost too real for a porn comic. Coach knows his way around women. He's grimly practical about the whole thing. Young people like to think love can last forever while older people know it isn't that easy. That's why cartoons for kids have the one love interest in most cases while adult shows are all about relationships coming and going. It's also why relationships with large age differences are frowned upon. Only one of them knows what they're getting themselves into.

Steve O

From personal experience, if you get emotionally involved with a serial cheater you're going to get hurt. A serial cheater has no emotional attachments and no empathy for who they hurt.

legojohn

Keep things raw and don't shy away from difficult topics. I wouldn't even consider this one of those, it fits the story very well and happy endings suck (If they are all there is).

Manrid Brizon

I get that. I have a buddy who draws comics and we discovered that he could turn my first 1,200 page novel into a 100-ish page illustrated book. Definitely took out a piece of my ego. I wasn't sure where you were going with this storyline, and storytelling is storytelling, in any form. That, and "dark and edgy" is an addictive drug. Trust me. I'm only a year sober. XD Keep up the good work, buddy.

Jay Naylor

I get you. I could go for a long time discussing the purpose of part 3, imagining them as little chapters in a bigger book, but there's no real analogy to something with the finality of an "end" to the story. These are webcomics covering passages in a person's life, and there's a part 4. An important aspect of part 3 was to have her completely move on from Coach, and have that part severed completely. Just like the difference between the girl she used to be, and the woman she's trying to be, making errors, and realizing Coach can't fit into that. But jeez. Two pages where I decide to draw her dealing with it emotionally, and coming through it, and I get warnings about being "dark and edgy." My gosh. :3

Manrid Brizon

I wasn't going to assume you were, but made a broad statement, just in case. My overall point was that "dark and edgy" only works if there's a hope spot or some kind of cathartic moment to offset the aforementioned darkness, otherwise it's just bleak and generates apathy. I've made similar storytelling mistakes in my previous novels and short stories. Just kickin' some knowledge!🤓

Jay Naylor

I'm not writing "myself" in this. My own experiences don't mirror any of these, and I was speaking in a very broad sense about something I might not otherwise cover. Sorry it's not to your liking. Not everything will be. Hopefully, there's enough other stuff around that I do to keep you happy. Thanks for the support.

Manrid Brizon

Dropping in a day late for my annual comment. I'm not the kind of person who requires happy endings in all things, but there is a happy medium between being a naive optimist and a cynic. People die, couples get divorced, kids end up separated and miserable but many inevitably find catharsis in new relationships or experiences; I'm not talking about fleeting lovers, because chasing pleasure is little more than a coping mechanism for the emotionally immature, but I digress. As a storyteller of many, many years, I'd like to share some advice and/or a warning. I've flipped through this comic recently, and it's the least engaging of any story simply because it has no light at the end of the tunnel. You haven't really hinted at any catharsis and that's pushing this comic into "audience induced apathy" territory. Maybe you're saving it for later or still cooking something up, but that's an issue. Storytelling is all about engaging with the audience's feelings. Be wary of "dark and edgy" because there's a threshold to how well that sells, and I'd advise against writing your own pain; that alienates the shit out of the audience who don't want to leave on a negative note. It's often better to harness your agony and use it in a completely unrelated story; my girlfriend left me so I'm going to write about an evil king rampaging through a shire of innocents, etc. In my own work, I'm trying hard to write a new novel/series where the naive character suffers abuses and sees the horrors of an uncaring world, only to overcome and earn their happy ending, after the necessary turmoil of their personal failings. It'll be a more realistic ending, not the Disney kind, but positive nonetheless. This gives poignancy to said suffering, and that's the point. Misery without purpose is just depressing. If at any point Brooke discovers herself and makes a positive change, whether it be a career or a decent guy and a family, then there's a point to this comic, otherwise it's a solid "meh..." Food for thought.

Mr. Powell

The emotion makes the comic more visceral - raw. Excessive mindless sex or happiness in comics are stale, because it isn’t real. A little pain is exactly what makes Brooke’s series and a few others so good. Excellent work.

Wildboy5699

Ah okay. That makes sense. I'm glad it wasn't an annoyance though.

Jay Naylor

It's not a real annoyance. But happy endings tend to put an end to the stories about the turmoil of relationships.

Wildboy5699

Sorry about my last comment about saying Brooke deserve happiness. I hope you weren't annoyed by it. I just feel bad for her because I think she's been hurt by so many people. Plus, I'm 23 and I haven't found that special someone yet. The last relationship I was in. She ended up cheating on me.

Jay Naylor

Haha, no thank you. I'm fine. x3

Big bad boys

Do you need a hug ?

Jay Naylor

It's all right.

Jay Naylor

Thanks! That's what I try to go for. Mostly.

Jay Naylor

Yeah, I'm not abridging things anymore.

Jay Naylor

It's fine. Thanks!

Jay Naylor

Oh yeah. I'm doing well. Don't worry. :3

IamUnknown

Hope you're doing alright, Jay.

KungFooTek

F.I.N.E. ; Fucked Up, Insecure, Neurotic, & Emotional. I pray you have peace in your heart, if not your soul.

Glenn Sellers

Happy endings, the basis of Disney movies, are rare in life. It's good to see that, even though she isn't happy now, she's pulled herself together, a la Scarlett O'Hara, with her "I will survive" attitude.

csstats

This is the type of thing that keeps me reading your comics. They're set apart with characters that have depth, emotion, the random philosophical stuff, and sometimes reality checks. Not just consequence-free debauchery.

Puppeteir

Write what you want to right if it makes sense for the characters. Most of the time political correctness is just people who think the world of themselves forcing their opinions on others rather than them trying to do what's right. If someone doesn't like it then bad for them your the author and it's your story and you yourself get to decide what happens always remember you can take advice and constrictive criticism into consideration but you should never feel the need to conform to others just because they don't like something.

pokediginut

I’m sorry about your divorce And yeah the rawness of this is real

ConnorCat

I remember them days. Yeah, you find yourself in a whirlwind of intense emotion, only to be completely turned around and disoriented when it suddenly stops. Good news is it passes. The bad news is it passes like a kidney stone. Edit to clarify, I'm commenting on Brooke specifically.