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SIS B4: Chapter 116: Worry and War Gains

🕑 Added 2021-05-30 23:17:15 +0000 UTC

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1. I must emphasize that Embers don't just grow passively. Even when used, they can still fail to gain progress. It's very enlightenment based. Think of it like daos from cultivation novels. 2. Yes, he had no applicable skills when he was blown up since he was stripped from the system at the time, hence no level ups. 3. Just a gut feeling, tbh. The Truthians didn't kill their own citizens so expect a new upgrade of a sort for Daz soon in regards to that. c: 4. You're a godsend. All fixed bar the Madison one. That's intentional, she is saying two different things. 'Have faith. It is Daz', just in her usual odd manner.

Thank you for the chapter! It really took him being blown apart by a star eternity to get to the next level of the endurance ember. I don't know if I should laugh or cry when I think about it, I mean those last percentages of the entry-level and then seven more of the beginner ones really hammers it in how insignificant Daz really is at the moment. Of course on Earth, he's practically a walking god with few peers but out there in the 'verse he could as well only be a gnat by some of the entities we have learned of. And I really like that. You can't have a system without some kind of conflict, which you have delivered. Well done. Wait, was the reason none of his skills levelled up because of his system being suppressed? I mean, it makes sense, to me at least, and would explain his lack of improvements/rewards. Now, he instead only gets his quest reward and title because those were the only actions the system saw. Am I getting somewhere close to the answer? I also wonder how you came up with that percentage of the population. Did just think, "heh, nice, but do a minus one too" or was there some kind of reasoning behind it? I'm actually curious now, is every population number completely arbitrary or is there some or much thought behind them? Now to everyone's favourite part, the paragraph of possible corrections! First, we have "but he had some avoided death numerous" were "somehow" seems to have been mistakenly shortened to "some". Then there's "beset was apprehension" were "was" probably should be "by". Next is "It, Daz." where "It" probably should be "In". Thereafter we have "before immediately refused to" were "refused" probably should switch tense to "refusing". After that, we have "could be actually mythical cities...'" where I have two possible conclusions. One, you wanted it to be "actually be" or even "be actual" instead of "be actually", your choice really. Next on the list is "'So everyone is the cathedral" where "is" probably should be "in". Thereafter we have a case of mistaken identity for an ember in "state of the [Ember of Digging].]" where "Digging" should be "Endurance". And after that, we have "and see is these cracks" were another "is" should be switched even if this time it's "if" instead. Lastly, we have "help up to more" where "up" probably should be "us". That's it for me. Hope you have a good one Lone, peace!


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