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LTW[R]: B2: Chapter 44: Already Won and Won't Lose

🕑 Added 2021-05-11 02:01:21 +0000 UTC

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1. Lone had tonnes of water tucked away in his skill. Ocean water. Not much sand or earth, if any. 2. This is gonna pay off massively next chapter. You'll see the diabolical plans I have for this crafty little Primal. 3. That too, shall get explained next chapter. Or the chapter after, the whole 'mind reading' stuff. 4. Fixed, and don't worry, I found a couple on my post-Elvis-has-commented-time-to-reread-the-chapter-read-through, haha.

Thank you for the chapter! I'm probably not one of the best wildlife explorers out there but I know some through osmosis if nothing else. Wouldn't it be both easier on Lone's storage and be cleaner if you just put some sand or earth on the fire? Still, not an expert here, just something I thought about while reading. Now, into the darkness. And what a desperate-sounding Darkness that is. Lone probably heard it too because the primal really sounded like this was his last bet and the time was almost up. Instead of doing the more "subtle" more spread out dream machinations he simply used what seemed to be most of his materials all at once trying to get a reaction. He seemed to get one at least, just not the one he appeared to have wanted. Extremely well done on showing so much emotion through these few Darkness included chapters. Is it just me or does Darkness try everything it can to make it seem like it can read minds? I mean if it could read Lone's mind from the start I have a feeling it would go a lot differently. It would make more sense if he could see either dreams or the "shadow" of people, their worst fears and regrets and plays those up. Of course, it may as well be that it can read minds, we simply know too little at the moment. Interesting all the same. The only error my newly woken consciousness managed to see was the one in the AN, "I massive overslept yesterday." were "massive" probably should be "massively". There may be something that I missed about that, I'm not an expert in English as you would know. Anyways, that's all from me today. Hope you have a good one Lone, peace!


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